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Falling down, Standing still
Contributed by
JoeyTrib1550
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Tuesday, 3rd October 2006 @ 03:17:30 PM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Falling down the sky, endlessly
Can’t stop on my own, still falling, like a stone
No one can hear my cry, despairingly
Scared to the bone, still falling, all alone
Falling through a lie, hopelessly
All the way down, still falling, ready to drown
You caught me in my fall
You saved me, kept me still
Though for you that was all
Just some time to fill
Burning with desire
Bursting with pain
You set me on fire
And left me in vain
But now I’m standing.
I can handle on my own.
Think I am suffering
But all I am is grown.
Just standing here, proudly
Can handle on my own, standing like a stone
Not knowing fear, bravely
But down to my very bone, I know I’m all alone
A single tear, slowly
Running down my cheek, my eyes, they drown
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Re: Falling down, Standing still
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 3rd October 2006 @ 03:36:20 PM AEST
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strong words in your poem
really set the dept of it
great job keep up the good work |
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Re: Falling down, Standing still
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Tuesday, 3rd October 2006 @ 04:19:32 PM AEST
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Such painful words penned to this page. Time heals all wounds my friend. You need to focus on moving on. The past is in the past where it belongs. May you find a special someone who shall be worthy of your heart & love.
A sad and emotional write. You have done a fine job expressing your thoughts in this great piece of writing. Keep up the wonderful work.
love, hugs n prayers,
Sue M |
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Re: Falling down, Standing still
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by Ruby2sdy on
Tuesday, 3rd October 2006 @ 04:56:06 PM AEST
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nicely said, some beautiful imagery and awesome use of internal rhyme, not afraid of being different, huh? I liked this one, so keep on writing them,
2sdy x |
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Re: Falling down, Standing still
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by ever1der on
Wednesday, 4th October 2006 @ 07:00:00 PM AEST
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| overall a really good poem..there are lines I would change around without altering the meaning, just to make the flow better..but that's just me. |
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Re: Falling down, Standing still
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by The_Unknown on
Sunday, 8th October 2006 @ 04:23:03 AM AEST
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hey! finally found ur poems ;)
it took me so long to find something so easy.
great write! luv the lines. very nice.
keep it up!
luvs ya!!
.~*Jess*~. |
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Re: Falling down, Standing still
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by deathdrop on
Sunday, 8th October 2006 @ 01:31:17 PM AEST
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another magnificant piece... hey if you ever want to talk more just PM me ok?
take care. rosie. |
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Re: Falling down, Standing still
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Monday, 13th November 2006 @ 12:52:27 PM AEST
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Powerful and deep... Very sad... I liked this poem because I can relate to how you are feeling in this... I loved this.. I felt your emotions and your pain and it was an amazing poem... Great job marc..
Take care
Christina |
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