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~*Another Lonely Day*~
Contributed by
eternal_dreamer
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Monday, 2nd October 2006 @ 08:32:26 PM in AEST
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Days and nights came and went
Yet my heart still aches for you
I’m wondering if you’re feeling
The same heartache that I do
Without you here by my side
I lay alone in my big empty bed
As the night slowly progresses
You come to me inside my head
In my dreams we are together
Under fair white stars in the sky
Where wishes from dream lovers
Are made and cast way up high
You take my hand, we share a dance
Waltzing through a midsummer’s night
We share a kiss, passion burns within
While dancing under the moon’s light
When morn slowly dawns at break
My envisions of you fade away
I awake from my deepest dreams
To face yet another lonely day…
By Sue Mina
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2006-10-02 20:32:26]
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Re: ~*Another Lonely Day*~
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 2nd October 2006 @ 08:48:25 PM AEST
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Very beautiful poem
heart ache and pain
with tender thoughts
Of better times pasted
Emotions going up then down
Your writing captivates me always
has read more then once
it inspires me to write more
well you just keep writing and you
know i will be here reading
hugs Joe S. |
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Re: ~*Another Lonely Day*~
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by ever1der on
Monday, 2nd October 2006 @ 10:02:08 PM AEST
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really nice write..you show your emotions well. If you want to grow more as a poet, and we all do; try rakerman's poetry..he writes a bit of everything but his love poems are a great learning tool. He hasn't posted in awhile..but you can look up his username..it's under the R's..in #2 I think....
Just a suggestion...he inspires me greatly. |
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Re: ~*Another Lonely Day*~
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by goodandevil on
Monday, 2nd October 2006 @ 10:55:48 PM AEST
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| lovely and beautiful poem. Why is it the night can be dreaded and longed for at the same time when we miss someone? |
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Re: ~*Another Lonely Day*~
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by Man_On_High on
Monday, 2nd October 2006 @ 11:11:28 PM AEST
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OH! Sue.. I have been waiting patiently for your return dear-
and what beautiful pain you've brought to the page.. as always my friend~
I hope this finds you well luv.. and that your days
are fraugh with the very same love and peace
you so selflessly afford, to the rest of us~
Your friend, fan and confidant~
Billy |
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Re: ~*Another Lonely Day*~
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by shelby on
Monday, 2nd October 2006 @ 11:42:49 PM AEST
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My dearest Sue,
its so nice to see you back again.
Though my heart is a little heavy to see how sad you are. I felt your heart. When your feeling lonely know that I'm just around the corner. ALways tucking you in my heart and thought. A beautiful poem as always.
~Michelle~ |
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Re: ~*Another Lonely Day*~
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 3rd October 2006 @ 02:19:18 AM AEST
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Sad but beautifully written. Hang tuff, my dear friend as joy cometh in the morning.
Luv, big huggs, prayer,
emy
Good to read something from you.
this couldn't have been written any better in my opinion. |
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Re: ~*Another Lonely Day*~
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by Vampirequeen on
Tuesday, 3rd October 2006 @ 09:46:08 AM AEST
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Awww Sue i am sorry that your feeling down.
So sad and emotional piece.
We love you and if you ever wanna talk let me know.
you take care now
love and hugs |
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Re: ~*Another Lonely Day*~
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by ever1der on
Tuesday, 3rd October 2006 @ 11:34:03 AM AEST
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"As the night slowly progresses
You come to me inside my head"
I don't really think you need the word slowly..but that's just me..when I read it, it reads smoother without that xtra word..then again, it does show that the night is not passing quickly..nice write anyhow. |
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Re: ~*Another Lonely Day*~
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 3rd October 2006 @ 07:13:13 PM AEST
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Sue .. such sadness that harbours within your kind heart. It
pains me that you have to endure this. I know that it shall not
last long though, dearest, for you are a beacon for those
that would embrace kindness and love.
painful write, but know, my friend, there are much brighter
mornings in store for you. : )
~Breezy |
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Re: ~*Another Lonely Day*~
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by lord_sogi on
Wednesday, 4th October 2006 @ 11:15:50 AM AEST
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| ah...inspires me to work more on one of my stories. nice poem! |
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Re: ~*Another Lonely Day*~
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by secretwind on
Wednesday, 4th October 2006 @ 06:37:28 PM AEST
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"you take my hand we share a dance"
something bout that line makes me smile
thanx u
I needed that...... |
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Re: ~*Another Lonely Day*~
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by jerseysue on
Friday, 6th October 2006 @ 05:34:50 PM AEST
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| This is so sad and full of emotion. The feelings jump out in every word. You can never be alone Sue , you have to many friends on here, and we are all here for you. Take care my friend, and remember we are always here for you. Lovely poem, as always. Sue x |
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Re: ~*Another Lonely Day*~
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 1st November 2006 @ 05:50:01 PM AEST
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aww!!! i hate that feeling, waking up from a good dream....wishing and hoping it was true...then realizing it wasnt....
its so sad and sweet.....sounds like it should be a song!
hugs to u too!!
*ashley* :-) |
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Re: ~*Another Lonely Day*~
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by yangdantien on
Wednesday, 1st November 2006 @ 11:15:29 PM AEST
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I read your passion and your awe for living and I suspect you reveal only after you have worked it out:
"As the night slowly progresses
You come to me inside my head"
this piece I felt had the deep expression of loneliness but it is not anguished rather very self aware as in the last line:
"...To face yet another day..."
We climb the mountain because its there and as a poet you relate both the climber and spelunker as you explore your emotional caverns and terrrain, goddess blossoming.
Peace
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Re: ~*Another Lonely Day*~
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by Spike on
Saturday, 16th December 2006 @ 03:52:38 AM AEST
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Strong, strong sentiment and all too reflective of the heart-condition afflicting us all, at some time. Take some solace in that sometimes the recall of something is more alluring that the thing itself.
S |
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Re: ~*Another Lonely Day*~
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by RLSS on
Wednesday, 20th December 2006 @ 08:47:40 PM AEST
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Ive tried writing poems like this, but they haven't come out as well s this, wihch is so clear in the emotions it is trying to express. I hear you loud and clear.
Beautiful. |
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Re: ~*Another Lonely Day*~
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by myheartsvoice on
Sunday, 21st January 2007 @ 06:48:57 PM AEST
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Most beautiful in every thought and deed. An
enjoyable experience this was to read. Truly lovely.
myheartsvoice |
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Re: ~*Another Lonely Day*~
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 24th April 2007 @ 02:26:37 PM AEST
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so full of longing....excellent write
love n' hugs nessa |
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Re: ~*Another Lonely Day*~
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by Dom on
Wednesday, 8th August 2007 @ 06:51:38 PM AEST
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The emotions in this are brimming around the words, but are never overdone, and it breaks the heart to read of such shattered hopes and sadness. The image that I found most evocative of the loneliness was that of you lying alone and small on the bed that should be for two.
Heartbreak comes and it feels as if nothing can be right again, but healing always follows shortly after.
Hugs,
Dom |
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