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Is This Fall Or My Feelings?
Contributed by
BloodyTearDrops
on
Monday, 2nd October 2006 @ 06:18:05 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Do you see the changes outside,
I do but all i do is sit in my room...and hide.
The leaves out there are constantly changing,
They are just like my feelings... but they are mostly raging.
Things always seem to shrivel up and die,
As i sit in my room and watch my lonely depressed life pass me by.
People are all HAPPY and what not,
Yeah i wish i could be like all of those people,
But it seems depression is all i have brought.
Wait can you ever help me,
Or do you even see?
I have put my loserish feelings on the stupid piece of paper,
I have even rhymed them with the gayest season Fall.
But no one ever sees my feelings,
And no one will ever hear my call.
Copyright ©
BloodyTearDrops
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2006-10-02 18:18:05]
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Re: Is This Fall Or My Feelings?
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 2nd October 2006 @ 07:56:50 PM AEST
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depression sucks but your poem is great
emotions mixed with the season nice twist
clever and well done
keep writing i will be reading |
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Re: Is This Fall Or My Feelings?
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by ever1der on
Monday, 2nd October 2006 @ 10:08:57 PM AEST
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| You used a comprison of your feelings with a beautiful season and the drying up of leaves..great job. |
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Re: Is This Fall Or My Feelings?
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by Kazzy1231 on
Saturday, 11th April 2009 @ 02:20:48 PM AEST
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| Very well written poem,I also know how you feel as I to suffer from Depression. |
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Re: Is This Fall Or My Feelings?
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by TeRrahiel on
Friday, 17th April 2009 @ 02:46:02 AM AEST
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| That's a very nice poem though I didn't like the fourth stanza. I wish you kept this level in the future:) |
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Re: Is This Fall Or My Feelings?
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by 2Deep4U on
Friday, 17th April 2009 @ 10:14:12 PM AEST
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| The seasons is my favorite thing to use in poetry. Good poem..always willing to hear more. |
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