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The Absolute BLOOM

Contributed by sally-heart-jack on Friday, 29th September 2006 @ 11:24:46 PM in AEST
Topic: EmotionalPoetry



I’m breaking down
I don’t want to feel
I don’t mean to be sad or spiteful
But I’m sorry, my eyes view surreal.

I can’t dream. I just can’t imagine lately

Think of what I lived for before.
My thoughts have been pondered
My questions have been answered
So why do I still wander?

Why am I still here?

I’ve been down there with you,
Your face isn’t the same though.
Despite the agony we both felt,
Since a long time ago.

Unlike me, those bittersweet feelings aren’t still with you.

Those shaky words I wrote
on the table with chalk
Don’t worry, just let me pretend this feel
And let me keep my door locked

Even if you feel I don’t mean this
Let me pretend you care.

I don’t feel to draw breath,
I don’t dare to dream
I don’t try to see the world
As if it’s smaller than me

So I’m gonna tell you,
I don’t deserve to stand
My mouth will set off my feet slipping
And I will sink under this land.

I will throw away that treasure box
That’s lost its’ own key
I’m flying high outta here
Giving over misery.

Istepdown




Copyright © sally-heart-jack ... [ 2006-09-29 23:24:46]
(Date/Time posted on site)





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Re: The Absolute BLOOM (User Rating: 1 )
by emystar on Saturday, 30th September 2006 @ 02:23:12 AM AEST
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this is awesome writing.
Hang tuff friend, as u r a great writer.
huggs,
emy


Re: The Absolute BLOOM (User Rating: 1 )
by one-curly-fry on Monday, 2nd October 2006 @ 06:15:48 AM AEST
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beautifully constructed. If you mean the first stanza - just run it through in your head a few times. You'll often find that it finds its natural beat that way.
I personally think it's all a very good poem and with some nice lines - esp. the stanzas that your addressing another person - good construction of ideas in short lines.
I feel this one and hope your not feeling too down.
Keep up the great work!

- Tim




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