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Ghosts of Ghosts
Contributed by
fionndruinne
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Thursday, 28th September 2006 @ 11:06:33 PM in AEST
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9.28.06
And I think
what haunts the most,
far from being
the ghosts of ghosts
of our first
dim hopes
of a blue sky
and smooth sailing,
is the apprehension,
before the hinges
squealed,
and the door was opened.
There is no fantasy
in the light
of this millennium.
In the brazen,
baring light.
In the wash of such
overbearing truth,
we can anticipate
no longer.
And I think
what haunts the host
of strange beings,
the ghosts of ghosts
of our parents'
shunned-century dreams
and comfortable,
age-old ideas,
is the heartless burden
we lade ourselves with,
truths that strip
us to the bone.
We go on,
though, to foot it through
the resultant bleak future-scape;
and that is our end,
until we find ourselves
one day,
changed, possible,
the ghosts of ghosts
of our former selves.
© MMVI ADL
Copyright ©
fionndruinne
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Re: Ghosts of Ghosts
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by deadheadpoet on
Friday, 29th September 2006 @ 12:12:51 AM AEST
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A very moving write, Andrew. I enjoyed the style. Always wonderful to read your words.
Thanks for sharing.
Peace, Laura |
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by emystar on
Friday, 29th September 2006 @ 01:01:24 AM AEST
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wow friend,
This is powerfull and written beautifully.
huggs,
emy
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by Silent-No-More on
Friday, 29th September 2006 @ 01:40:01 AM AEST
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Ohhhhh.... I like this!!!!!
I adore deep pondering that makes itself to the page... especially, perhaps, when it is somehow both conclusive and elusive. And I... I believe fell into this once when those (fabulous!) hinges squealed. There is so very much here that every reader, I think, would do well to delve in. I cannot even tolerate the thought that someone might give it quick glance. Oh, it deserves much more than that!
Excellent, excellent work, Andrew!
~Snemma
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Re: Ghosts of Ghosts
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Friday, 29th September 2006 @ 07:14:24 PM AEST
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Dearest Andrew, Wow this simply blew me away. One of the best poems I have ever read. A deep and most moving write. I honestly don't have the right words to give your outstanding poem the credit that it deserves. Well done and thanks so much for sharing your dynamic work with us.
hugs n prayers,
Sue M
who is gonna go back and read it again :-) |
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Re: Ghosts of Ghosts
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by Spike on
Friday, 29th September 2006 @ 08:26:15 PM AEST
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For me too, Andrew, one of the most irresitibly presented set of complex images and sub texts that I have ever read on site, with an amazingly lyrical hook line. Just envious my man, and deeply touched.
This poem is so saturated with painful pondering of the zeitgeist of our generation compared to that of our parents, and also, what could have been for us.Still, not all is drowned in the wake of time, as you say, and universal themes tend to recycle over decades, centuries. Majic and mystery and high order callings are sleeping in the soil........
S.
p.s. this one immediately inspired me to go and write a poem called 'Dweller', so thank you for that. |
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Re: Ghosts of Ghosts
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by lostinmyself on
Saturday, 30th September 2006 @ 01:06:03 AM AEST
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You should be proud of this one, Andrew. You've opened up a bit more here than you have before (or at least for a while) I think.
It's sad, really.
A thought provoking write. (Which is really something when it's 6:30am.. I usually don't wake up my brain until 9 ;) )
I will be back to this often, I am sure.
Great write, my friend.
*hugs*
Phil xxx |
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Re: Ghosts of Ghosts
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by shelby on
Saturday, 30th September 2006 @ 08:18:51 AM AEST
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Andrew,
An intently woven master of words you are.
Alway a pleasure! Your style, incredible. Loved the ghost of ghosts theme to it,
~Michelle~ |
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 2nd October 2006 @ 02:47:38 AM AEST
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A very thought provoking and just a damn good poem, Andrew. Thank you for sharing.
Tim
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Re: Ghosts of Ghosts
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 21st October 2006 @ 11:25:02 PM AEST
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Woah. *blinks a bit*
I am so, so sorry now that I haven't wandered to your page in yonks.
This is.. exhilarating.
Kinda left me all breathless and curious and even a bit confused ("ghosts of ghosts" *stops to get her head around that again :P).
I can't even pick a favourite stanza here, that wouldn't be fair to the poem as a whole.
I just want to say that was amazing.
Thankies for sharing this with everyone. :)
Kat.
(off to re-read)
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Re: Ghosts of Ghosts
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by Rakerman1999 on
Saturday, 28th October 2006 @ 03:09:18 PM AEST
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Egads man....I had to check to see if I had mistakenly clicked on a write from a sage poet of the past. This is astounding in its depth and the presentation leaves me speachless....no small task.
Very, VERY well done
Barkeep!
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by yangdantien on
Monday, 30th October 2006 @ 10:54:46 PM AEST
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Thank you for your comments.I find a poem can be a like a solo or duet, it can express as sonata or concerto and others are orchestrated symphonic. Your effort is well polished and highly accomplished. As i scrolled through your more recent pieces I was struck how you move between the meaning and the suggestions in between the lines. As well you have appeal to all as the old voice your poetry is a deeper speech from your ancient well developed connection to being. I hope to digest more of your good work.
Peace
Yang |
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Re: Ghosts of Ghosts
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 1st November 2006 @ 06:56:09 AM AEST
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Deep and profound, definately not a poem to be taken lightly.
I truly read this as quite a bleak picture of the world fraught with loss, and hope that I read a glimmer of salvation in the last lines.
Impressive Andrew! |
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Re: Ghosts of Ghosts
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by blowfish_jane on
Saturday, 18th November 2006 @ 02:19:14 AM AEST
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God I forgot how good you are when it comes to writing a poem.
This was well written, well thought and just perfect in it's own way.
I'll be reading and following your work.
A fan xox |
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 19th November 2006 @ 02:29:32 AM AEST
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The previous comments say it all, great work Andrew.
J. |
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Re: Ghosts of Ghosts
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by Benny14 on
Tuesday, 21st November 2006 @ 02:54:08 AM AEST
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| it seems you are in need of no more comments here, but here goes: great write, brilliantly executed. i sometimes get bogged down with some of the poetry on this site, but every now and then i get to read intelligent, thought provoking work, so thank you, i plan on reading the rest of your poems. |
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Re: Ghosts of Ghosts
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by Wachumiri on
Friday, 16th February 2007 @ 05:35:46 PM AEST
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This is the best of yours that I've read, deepest, too.
There, enough of that, don't drop the brush.
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Re: Ghosts of Ghosts
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 1st March 2007 @ 08:58:09 AM AEST
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Ah,those long-past hopes of blue skies and smooth sailing.I remember too,though cannot quite place them,accurately,in time,those squealing hinges.Once crossed,the threshold of such a door sets in motion the inexorable changes of reality.Yes,perhaps to ghosts of ghosts of our former selves.
Loved swimming in this poem.The waters may not have been at the temperature you set,but they cleansed me well,all the same,
Den |
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Re: Ghosts of Ghosts
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 15th March 2007 @ 02:57:03 AM AEST
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The truth is a language worth speaking, friend. Though I sometimes find myself trying to force myself into your words, it is always worth it. You remind me that words, whether complex or simple, are but vessels of truth when used for such. And as it is truth that is my native tounge, I find your pieces much worth deciphering.
Peace and grace to you,
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Re: Ghosts of Ghosts
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by needledancing on
Saturday, 17th March 2007 @ 05:24:06 AM AEST
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| A fabulous piece well written, peaceful flow, articulate, vivid and creative thought, inspirational that yes indeed "one day changed, possible, the ghosts of ghosts of our former selves". Bravo |
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Re: Ghosts of Ghosts
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by Loende on
Friday, 23rd March 2007 @ 08:29:33 PM AEST
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My goodness! Andrew actually emotes! (Just kidding, War) This is by far the best thing that I have read in some time. It would seem that you listened well, Childe. In a matter of a few stanzas, you were able to take us through generations and this path that we all have to tread. I like the feeling this formed: a bit sad, and then a strange peace as it settled.
Well done indeed, mo caraid.
Be Well,
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Re: Ghosts of Ghosts
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by zenith66 on
Sunday, 25th March 2007 @ 10:45:10 PM AEST
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This is a fantastically executed poem and i took great pleasure in reading it. I am looking forward to reading the rest of you work..
Top stuff.... |
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by ladyfawn on
Tuesday, 17th April 2007 @ 02:02:29 AM AEST
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so beautifully written, and omg all too true....
love n' hugs nessa |
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