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is pain the only answer to my cries
Contributed by
blackrose233
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Monday, 25th September 2006 @ 03:38:15 PM in AEST
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I hate this world today there so much controversy
Its like im in hell and hell is where ill dwell
Is pain the only answer to my cries
Could I close my eyes forever would any one care
If I close my eyes forever would the would change
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Re: is pain the only answer to my cries
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 25th September 2006 @ 04:07:08 PM AEST
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| this poem is from someone who is not sure of there worth, right? if thats the case then i ve been there someone out there cares. but if im totally wrong its a good poem any ways. alot of people feel like this. |
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Re: is pain the only answer to my cries
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by Fionndruinne on
Tuesday, 26th September 2006 @ 01:10:00 AM AEST
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As far as structure and such-like, punctuation and regular capitalization would help. As for the content, yes, there is very much wrong with the way things are, but do you know, nothing changes for the better on its own. Rather it grows worse. It entropes, goes downhill. But it's an important thing that we as human beings have been given the ability to change things for the better, in small ways. When you look at it a certain way, that's a powerful gift, as it's against the trend of the entire world around us.
Doesn't that sound like a good reason to try? Writing-wise as well - poetry can be a mirror of our progress. Keep trying.
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Re: is pain the only answer to my cries
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 22nd October 2006 @ 03:42:13 PM AEST
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I can really relate to this poem because i have no one to hug me when Im in pain emotionally so i wash it away with physical pain. i know its not healthy but this is what this poem makes me think of!
Excellent job! |
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Re: is pain the only answer to my cries
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by sally-heart-jack on
Thursday, 26th October 2006 @ 08:00:56 PM AEST
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Okay, THIS is the poem I needed to read today.
I had like such a horrible day, basically everything went wrong, and this is exactly how I feel.
But anyways about the actual poem lol, I like it. Made good points.
And I like your username by the way! XD
You did good! ^_^ |
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Re: is pain the only answer to my cries
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by SuicidalSon on
Tuesday, 13th November 2007 @ 10:50:50 PM AEST
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I do believe that it would stay the same
and it will always be the most played game |
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