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Love is Like a Dance Floor
Contributed by
one-curly-fry
on
Sunday, 24th September 2006 @ 08:04:37 AM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Love is like a dance floor
where few care to learn
but step out
- offer a hand
to tread on feet
having fun
- for their own sake
to leave the other sore
careless, continuing
and each of the dancers
- that care to learn
find themselves let down
- sore and confused
“was life meant to be like this?”
Well here is one dancer
to sit by the wall
watch the beauty fidget around
but not offer his hand
No more!
No, my toes are sore
- heart, disappointed
Love is like a dance floor
and I am a dancer
worn thin by carelessness
and so I shall dance no more.
23/9/06
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2006-09-24 08:04:37] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Love is Like a Dance Floor
(User Rating: 1 ) by detourchick on
Sunday, 24th September 2006 @ 08:34:29 AM AEST (User
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i have to say i really liked the whole poem but t he ending is the best part |
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Re: Love is Like a Dance Floor
(User Rating: 1 ) by Winterland on
Sunday, 24th September 2006 @ 11:35:56 AM AEST (User
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I enjoyed this poem very much. The metaphor and description within is very good!
I would also like to add that some people do wish to learn to dance but may not know how. Don't give up on them all.
Jennifer |
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Re: Love is Like a Dance Floor
(User Rating: 1 ) by MG_Akela22090 on
Sunday, 24th September 2006 @ 02:57:07 PM AEST (User
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Wow, I love the last few lines...it's very vivid. Nice write! |
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Re: Love is Like a Dance Floor
(User Rating: 1 ) by Skillz on
Monday, 25th September 2006 @ 03:02:56 AM AEST (User
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what a truly wonderful poem..but how sad to feel this way...giving up is giving in , please never do..you have much to offer. This part of ur poem stands out to me as truly great
"and each of the dancers
- that care to learn
find themselves let down
- sore and confused" |
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Re: Love is Like a Dance Floor
(User Rating: 1 ) by Alison on
Saturday, 30th September 2006 @ 01:31:09 PM AEST (User
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yes i agree! very well said, i love the way you put it! good write |
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Re: Love is Like a Dance Floor
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Friday, 13th October 2006 @ 09:30:40 PM AEST (User
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this is beautiful. i've never seen love explained so wonderful. never thought about it - but you are right...love is like a dance floor...
- Bethani - |
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