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My darkest hour
Contributed by
brave_celt
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Saturday, 23rd September 2006 @ 04:42:55 PM in AEST
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in this dismal hour
I sit at the edge of our bed
trying to find the bravery to lay down my weary head
I am grateful for our memories
for they will never die
but it keeps me on my knees
that you had to say good bye
I reminisce on days of gladness
when you were close to me
as I fade into the darkness
of loves forsaken sea
I can't go on knowing that you'll
never be my bride
no I just can't go on living without you
by my side
no life isn't worh living
since our love had to die
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Re: My darkest hour
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by brittaney on
Saturday, 23rd September 2006 @ 07:27:38 PM AEST
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The word choice in this piece is great. It all seems to frit together nicely. Well done!
Britt~ |
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Re: My darkest hour
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by detourchick on
Saturday, 23rd September 2006 @ 08:33:17 PM AEST
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really good
just really good |
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Re: My darkest hour
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by CassandraCain on
Saturday, 23rd September 2006 @ 10:07:59 PM AEST
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| Nicely written. I'd suggest use punctuation. It gives the effect of knowledgeable resources. It also looks professional. I think It's a good poem. You're off to a great start! |
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Re: My darkest hour
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by chaos78 on
Saturday, 23rd September 2006 @ 11:39:31 PM AEST
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| truly sad but well written i did enjoy reading ,good poem |
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Re: My darkest hour
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by RLWildPassions on
Sunday, 24th September 2006 @ 02:33:19 PM AEST
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but it keeps me on my knees
that you had to say good bye
but you see what you did write.. all the world here.. and you keep that feel, that love that once give to you, and you no forget it. and I say to you.. it is lovely. your poem is so wonderful a remininisce.. and it is helpful for your heart to keep. so do that. rl |
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Re: My darkest hour
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by Gothchyk on
Monday, 9th October 2006 @ 05:49:28 PM AEST
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| great write, you expressed the pain of losing love beautifully. |
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