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One Thing
Contributed by
Biggie
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Monday, 18th September 2006 @ 10:57:48 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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I thought I knew everything
Until I found myself scared
Scared of the one thing
The thing I knew best right now
Blinded by that one thing
One thing kept my fears inside
Hiding my pain you say
You’ll hurt yourself again you say, yet…
Slowly the sun rises & one thing begins to fade
Fading slowly you say, but I look beyond
I had fallen to what seemed like death
Only to rise again & realize this one thing?!
I was Scared to open that door & see clearly
See I’m not alone…
The one thing I thought I knew best
Scared only to be lonely
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Biggie
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2006-09-18 22:57:48]
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Re: One Thing
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by twbanter on
Monday, 18th September 2006 @ 11:30:50 PM AEST
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Me too Big... Scared as hell. But someone once straightened me out...
Joe Piscapoe... straightened me out once... "ONCE." (Johny Dangerously! Lol)
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Re: One Thing
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 31st March 2009 @ 06:57:33 AM AEST
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"&" looks ugly in poetry, as does "I was Scared" (capitals), and the "?!" seems a bit arbitrary.
The repetition of "the/one thing" feels kind of awkward, you could remove half the examples in the beginning and it would flow better. |
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