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When Sick Becomes Real
Contributed by
light_to_your_darkness
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Friday, 15th September 2006 @ 01:43:21 PM in AEST
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DarkPoetry
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Darkest days and brilliant skies
dreams long gone though never die
scars are deep and blood pours red
all and nothing within my head
Memories now are long forgot
faces blur and flesh will rot
songs play over, words mean some
souless, breathless, sightless come
Hearts ripped out and organs crushed
emotions turn as faces flush
pictures circle gruesome sights
darkness covers evils flight
Open eyes are brown and clear
no movement save for one red tear
what once was all inside one's head
sits still as death beside my bed.
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Re: When Sick Becomes Real
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by Harimitsu on
Friday, 15th September 2006 @ 02:50:07 PM AEST
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It is a very good poem. It reminded me of some of the first poems I had ever written and it opened inside me a sense of nostalgia for forgotten times and a sense of something else more accustomed to... "Enjoyment?"
Anyway, it's a very good piece of poetry. The rhythm guided the stanzas nicely together and the imagery, as a whole, seemed effortless. It’s very good.
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Re: When Sick Becomes Real
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 15th September 2006 @ 03:01:27 PM AEST
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I agree with Harimitsu's comment.
I like this. The flow is perfect, the words just work together really well.
It does seem very nightmarish, too. Rushed and surreal.
Good write,
Phil xxx |
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Re: When Sick Becomes Real
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by chaos78 on
Friday, 15th September 2006 @ 03:34:47 PM AEST
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| messed up nightmare great poem i truly like and thank you for sharing |
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Re: When Sick Becomes Real
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by Boobee on
Saturday, 16th September 2006 @ 02:35:41 PM AEST
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| This is nice... I like your style of writing. |
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