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Live Every Moment
Contributed by
jazzy_jazz_21
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Thursday, 14th September 2006 @ 06:10:58 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Live every moment
Like it's your last
Because what might seem distant
Can come so fast
You never know
When an angel will lend out it's hand
And say it's time to go
To this magical land
Where the streets are gold
And the walls clear glass
You will be so amazed
That you are here at last
So love slowly
And forgive quickly
Because you never know
When it's your time to go
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jazzy_jazz_21
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2006-09-14 18:10:58]
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Re: Live Every Moment
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by Niki-P on
Thursday, 14th September 2006 @ 07:10:01 PM AEST
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i felt this was a very cliched way of writing a cliched subject however i still enjoyed these lines:
So love slowly
And forgive quickly
Dont get me wrong, in my opinion it was well written and i liked the way it flowed from one part to the next, just very cliched. |
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Re: Live Every Moment
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by catz77 on
Thursday, 14th September 2006 @ 07:59:15 PM AEST
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you need to broaden your
vocab a bit
but good job with the third stanza
catz |
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Re: Live Every Moment
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by twbanter on
Thursday, 14th September 2006 @ 09:48:15 PM AEST
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Dido...
You have a talent there.... But you are using well worn lines, though you are using them well..... Let's get creative, and make some new lines that one day, will be well used as well.
Tom W
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Re: Live Every Moment
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by MoonlightKiss on
Monday, 2nd March 2009 @ 12:21:11 PM AEST
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I liked it!
Like the others said... A bit more vocab would be good.
But overall, it was a sweet poem.
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