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THE ONE
Contributed by
kasean
on
Wednesday, 13th September 2006 @ 09:25:22 PM in AEST
Topic:
Lifepoems
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Your laying up all nite,
Just thinking about THE ONE.
Everything feels so right,
yet everything else feels wrong.
You're trying to read your heart,
but you can't quite understand,
you used to be apart,
of that loving faithful man.
But when everthing starts to fall apart,
you can't understand why?
So many pieces of your heart,
was smashed by that ONE Guy!
Copyright ©
kasean
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2006-09-13 21:25:22]
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Re: THE ONE
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by Drapes on
Thursday, 14th September 2006 @ 04:26:30 PM AEST
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Aw, I am so sorry for you!
I can definitely feel your emotion in this. It's a great piece and I'm sure so many can relate at least somewhat.
Good job and best wishes. |
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Re: THE ONE
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by loveisendless on
Monday, 18th September 2006 @ 10:26:16 PM AEST
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WHEN YOU'RE SPECIAL YOUR HEART SHALL NEVER BE BLANK,
BECAUSE THERE'S A CERTAIN PART IT NEEDS & TO GRIEF YOU SAY,NO THANKS,
DON'T EVER GIVE IN & JUST TAKE A FALL,
WHEN YOU CAN LIVE A LOVE TO ITS END EVEN UP AGAINST A WALL !
You're not a loser,so you don't have to settle for one,if you're half as good as you write,then
there will be a gift-for the right guy !! Great poem !!!
DAN!!!! |
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Re: THE ONE
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by ShaonKra on
Sunday, 22nd February 2009 @ 04:36:38 AM AEST
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| Good emotional poem, though I think that 'was' on the last line should be replaced with 'were', not being rude, it just stood out at me thats all. Keep it up, good stuff |
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