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Point of no return
Contributed by
Rakerman1999
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Wednesday, 13th September 2006 @ 08:23:17 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Once upon a happy time
I filled the page with words of rhyme
in flowered verse that flowed with grace
Inspired by a distant face
But time has run its destined course
and rhyme gave birth to deep remorse
that suffocated grace it seems
along with faces, hopes and dreams
And now in throes of deep regret
the tears and hurt I can't forget
have choked the inspiration dead
Its rotting corpse lies in my head
The flowered prose and flowing verse
have gone from good to bad to worse
to worthless words that crash and burn...
Is this the point of no return ?
L. Carling c2006
Copyright ©
Rakerman1999
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2006-09-13 08:23:17]
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Re: Point of no return
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by Winterland on
Wednesday, 13th September 2006 @ 09:13:03 AM AEST
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What a wonderful write about the bane of all creative people. I hope, for all of us, that your muse is only sleeping, dreaming perhaps of new and wonderful things to inspire you with.
Jennifer |
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Re: Point of no return
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by deadheadpoet on
Wednesday, 13th September 2006 @ 09:18:44 AM AEST
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Larry, I don't think you'll ever lose it. Maybe it just settles back for awhile. You are a poet, my friend. The words shall flow. Nice to see you, man.
Peace, Laura |
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Re: Point of no return
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by Silent-No-More on
Wednesday, 13th September 2006 @ 10:56:45 AM AEST
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I have to imagine, dear Larry, that many will come here and comment that this is evidence enough that poetry still pulses within your pen. And those that have read you consistently will comment as well, I suspect, that we haven't any doubt that you are and ever will be a poet regardless of how frequently or infrequently the words are making it to the page. For me, your inclination to write this piece is enough, in and of itself, to convince me (as if I needed convincing to begin with!). I could mention as well the perfect flow and the glorious decision of setting apart the fourth line in each stanza - but that would seem unnecessary and redundant perhaps as evidence enough was found when this page was opened.
My diagnoses then (*wink*).... is that, perhaps, your inspiration has temporarily succumbed to coma. Coma patients are sometimes mistaken for corpses oddly enough but have been known to awaken, fully even, at unsuspected times. I see your inspiration lying in a hospital bed, eyes closed... taking, perhaps, a needed break --- and this... as the twitching of its hand. I, and many others I'm certain, shall wait as patiently as we know how for its eyes to flutter open and it to sit up and bed and say something like "what day is it?" or "what am I doing here?". In the meantime, I'll savor this because it is fabulous for so many reasons and it absolutely merits savoring.
~Snemmy
(who visits your page with a fair amount of regularity regardless of whether you're posting regularly or not)
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Re: Point of no return
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by shelby on
Wednesday, 13th September 2006 @ 11:43:36 AM AEST
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Where has my man of the roses been?
I was so happy to see your name upon the ypdc screen once more. I have sure missed you.
As far as your muse being dead, na now way! This is a result of the king of poetry strong and talented as always. Though your pen sings less these days it still sings a melody just the same. One that I have missed very much. I hope your muse lights up and you find your way back for good!
Missed her rose man
hugs
Michelle |
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Re: Point of no return
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by BobbyZimmerman on
Wednesday, 13th September 2006 @ 06:08:27 PM AEST
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| Excellent poem...it will come back to you....Keep it up, good write. |
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Re: Point of no return
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by lillyjane on
Thursday, 14th September 2006 @ 08:10:02 AM AEST
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| Reading this poem, im sure it has not gone.. Sometimes inspitation seems to go then suddenly floods back.. Think yours is, a great poem.. xxx |
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Re: Point of no return
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by Spike on
Friday, 15th September 2006 @ 06:04:54 AM AEST
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Larry, let the corpse rot, wait till the daisy's come up, then pick 'em. Man, half the people on this site can only dream of writing as well as you do when you are feeling uninspired. Maybe you're just moving on to another level or style of poetry, where, I'm sure you'll knock our socks off.
S. |
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Re: Point of no return
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 15th September 2006 @ 05:25:18 PM AEST
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Well, Larry, I'm sorry to see you lose inspiration - definitely not an easy thing to work through. But, well, you can see your readers have faith in your ability to adapt and carry on, and I bet you will. Perhaps this is indeed the end of what we and you knew as your poetry, but for a mind which is able to feel inspiration, inspiration will make itself known.
Perhaps this may be a time of growth, as well. In a quest to understand, mayhap leaving something behind is a sign of having come to greater understanding. We may see still greater works from your pen.
With a toast to old times,
Andrew |
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Re: Point of no return
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 22nd September 2006 @ 05:44:00 PM AEST
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Larry, my friend, that title is immensely stirring just
as it is, but what follows is incredibly and painfully
honest, (and beautifully so).
I must ask ... if this is, in fact, the point of no return,
can you answer me this? Why would you want to
return? Because it's familiar? Because it's comforting?
Because it's, (dare I say it), safe? I agree with
a couple others here, (who I admire greatly), who have
said, perhaps this is just a phase in your poetry's life. A
moment of pause in order to wake up to a new and
most glorious, (albeit different), muse. In any case, I
still hold fast to the belief that you could never
lose your inspiration fully. How can it be, when you
continue to pour out lovely verses like this?
Roses for the rose-giver
(about a hundred of em)
~Breezy |
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Re: Point of no return
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by Opium on
Wednesday, 27th September 2006 @ 02:06:44 AM AEST
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I can't believe this! yesterday I was reading some of your best poems and I felt really inspired, as always, and decided to write again after a year of "dead muse". What you need is one night by the ocean side and the waves will sure be more convincing than me.
All I can say is that I am back better than ever and I am back because I envy great poets like you and try to imitate them.
My old friend, art flows in our veins, when art dies what would we be? |
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Re: Point of no return
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Wednesday, 4th October 2006 @ 06:46:04 PM AEST
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Larry~
It's extraordinary and gifted poets like you that I love and admire so much. I have always looked up to you my dear friend. I've always been inspired and wanted to keep writing after reading any one of your phenomenal writes. I have faith in you my dear friend, I always have and I always will.
Whether or not you are or aren't inspired you pen the most outstanding and remarkable poetry I have ever come to read.
You will make a spectacular come back dearest Larry~ I'll be patiently awaiting for your return.
with love, hugs n prayers from your devoted fan/friend,
Sue M
who sadly misses Larry and his work so much :-( |
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Re: Point of no return
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by ever1der on
Thursday, 5th October 2006 @ 05:43:23 PM AEST
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Sorry I missed this one.. you're a muse to many..so I hope the words come soon. maybe when you aren't working so long and have time to breathe.. however long we have to wait it will be worth it.. meanwhile, I'll re-read your book and be waiting for roses if any of my writes are worthy.
Mary |
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Re: Point of no return
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by Merry on
Saturday, 28th October 2006 @ 04:26:52 AM AEST
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Even in the darkest corners of your soul you find the right words to express what that darkness feels like. This poem flows so beautifully - the meter is musical.
Daisies for the King
Merry |
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Re: Point of no return
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by sweetangeluk on
Saturday, 31st March 2007 @ 02:03:36 PM AEST
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You have poetic ink running through your veins and your words may hibernate for a while to wake refreshed, ready to be written by a magnificent poets hand.
Fantastic
Love Angelxx |
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