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Bird Brained
Contributed by
faiton
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Friday, 8th September 2006 @ 06:21:26 PM in AEST
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There was a young pigeon, it’s true,
Who fancied himself as a stew.
So he jumped in a pot
‘Til it became hot
But nobody would touch it due
To the feathers and beak and countless pigeon diseaes
Floating in the gravy.
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2006-09-08 18:21:26]
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Re: Bird Brained
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by rdv1960 on
Friday, 8th September 2006 @ 06:37:05 PM AEST
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Hi faiton,
Start out as a limerick with a slightly wrong metrum but a nice touch.
Then you definitely break it up with the long sentence. Surprising and a makes one wonder what's coming but, apart from the disappointing form, the clou isn't that surprising.
A better Limerick would have been better, funnier; the story's good, though.
Greetz,
roberto
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Re: Bird Brained
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by Spike on
Monday, 23rd October 2006 @ 05:46:33 AM AEST
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Ridiculously funny. I felt gut-stirring nausea as well as the ribs being tickled.
I know there's a name for this style of poetry,
dear to the heart of you and me
but I can't well remember
perhaps by December
or when the stem finally cells kick in.
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