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lost soul
Contributed by
Hannah_Heaven
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Friday, 8th September 2006 @ 05:37:07 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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i remember your touch
the scent of your warmth
against me you stayed
regret was of the past
but yet.
you killed the only love i had
it broke me
i lay dying and im pouring
counting regret
as i smoulder
i burn inside
fire of hate
AM I TOO LOST?
my God why do you hate me so
why do you wonder me in such confusion
do you remember me?
lost for so long
will you be on the other side
or will you forget me
im dying
im praying
bleeding
and SCREAMING
AM I TOO LOST TO BE SAVED
AM I TOO LOST
return to me..
my holy love
will i remember the peace
the remorce of hatred
no i stay here
remource
I WANT TO DIE
my God
AM I TOO LOST
return to me
my lost soul
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Re: lost soul
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by rdv1960 on
Friday, 8th September 2006 @ 05:59:36 PM AEST
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Hi Hannah,
I do seem to miss a little bit of poetry, it's more like a prayer and a cryin' out loud.
Still you seem to have the talent to express feelings, strong emotions.
Leave a little bit to guess for the reader, a bit of mystery, the pain and other strong emo's pointed at, touched.
Give your readers a chance?
Greetz,
roberto |
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Re: lost soul
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by BobbyZimmerman on
Friday, 8th September 2006 @ 08:31:23 PM AEST
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| Good write, very emotional. |
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Re: lost soul
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by drtylilsecret on
Friday, 8th September 2006 @ 11:14:33 PM AEST
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I read this poem and.....
"Tourniquet"
i tried to kill the pain
but only brought more
i lay dying
and i'm pouring crimson regret and betrayal
i'm dying, praying, bleeding and screaming
am i too lost to be saved
am i too lost?
my God my tourniquet
return to me salvation
my God my tourniquet
return to me salvation
do you remember me
lost for so long
will you be on the other side
or will you forget me
i'm dying, praying, bleeding and screaming
am i too lost to be saved
am i too lost?
my God my tourniquet
return to me salvation
my God my tourniquet
return to me salvation
i want to die!!!
my God my tourniquet
return to me salvation
my God my tourniquet
return to me salvation
my wounds cry for the grave
my soul cries for deliverance
will i be denied Christ
tourniquet
my suicide
This is the song called "tourniquet", it's by evanescence, the similarity between a lot of your lines and the lyrics from the song are much to be called coincidence...maybe you didn't steal the entire song, but you did steal some lines, and maybe you did this subconsiously, but......only post work that is 100% original, and yours. |
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