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Promise
Contributed by
xXxmegsxXx
on
Wednesday, 6th September 2006 @ 03:38:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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I face into the wind
It brushes through my hair
I close my eyes and wish
And suddenly, you're there
Your spirit fills my heart
Your memory holds my hand
Leading me to the edge
To be together, like we planned
I cut through the clouds
As love lifts me in the air
Your promise gives me hope
Releasing me from despair
Gently I start to fall
Down towards the sea
I whisper your name
As I am set free
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2006-09-06 15:38:50] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Promise
(User Rating: 1 ) by Skinney86 on
Wednesday, 6th September 2006 @ 04:03:29 PM AEST (User
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This is an uplifting and heartfelt poem. I wish there was a little more. But great write! |
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Re: Promise
(User Rating: 1 ) by xXxmegsxXx on
Wednesday, 6th September 2006 @ 04:12:17 PM AEST (User
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hum yes, i think you're right, it does need a bit more. this verse goes on the end
I plunge through the waves
Water replaces air
In death we'll stay as one
Life was not as fair |
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Re: Promise
(User Rating: 1 ) by In_a_while on
Wednesday, 6th September 2006 @ 05:38:51 PM AEST (User
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great writing... it has the feeling of a soft pillow. it
rhymed well and the added verse was exceptionally
graphic as well. Keep it up. |
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Re: Promise
(User Rating: 1 ) by Drapes on
Thursday, 14th September 2006 @ 04:56:49 PM AEST (User
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This is beautiful. Touching. Amazing write! |
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