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I Will Not
Contributed by
Karlee14
on
Thursday, 31st August 2006 @ 04:13:30 PM in AEST
Topic:
toughstuff
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I will not let you hurt me
The way you did before.
You will not break me
The way you wanted to.
I will not love you
The way I did yesterday.
I will not let you betray me
The way you always seem to do.
I will not let you bring me down again.
I will not let you pretend
Like I wasn't fine before you came.
I will not take the blame
For all the stuff you pulled.
For everything you stole
From me.
I will not let you waste
Another minute of time.
I will not let you take
Another shread of my heart.
I will not let you control me
The way you've always done.
I will not let you block me
And think that you've won.
I will not let the one
I thought I could trust
Block common sense from me.
I will not let the one
That thought I couldn't think for myself
Take anything more from me.
I will not let the one
Who I spent every waking minute on
Hold me back anymore.
I will not let the one
Who knows I can do it alone
Take my life any longer.
You shouldn't either.
Copyright ©
Karlee14
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2006-08-31 16:13:30]
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Re: I Will Not
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 31st August 2006 @ 04:45:56 PM AEST
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quite an empowering write. the title and the repeated "i will not" really drives home the point. i'm familiar with the feeling expressed here... that fustration of being in a relationship that isn't good for you. aknowledging it like you did here is the first step in finding your way back to who you are supposed to be and getting what you want. good luck
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Re: I Will Not
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 1st September 2006 @ 09:57:21 PM AEST
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| well i think you certainly got your message across! good write. the only thing i would suggest is to watch your tenses while you write. I understand the past present and future idea you tried to incorporate, but there may be a way to run through them more smoothly. |
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Re: I Will Not
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by drtylilsecret on
Sunday, 3rd September 2006 @ 11:06:45 PM AEST
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i can totally feel the pain in there, the style is sorta similar to my "too late" poem. but great write, hope it all works out for you.
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Re: I Will Not
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 30th September 2006 @ 09:37:22 PM AEST
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I will not say that this is a bad poem
Because it is not
I will say this thou
It just the right spot
I will not say i wont read your poems no more
cause when you look for me you will have comments galore
just thought i would try to mk you laugh
a little bit
good poem |
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