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Snow Globe
Contributed by
trini
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Monday, 28th August 2006 @ 08:29:05 AM in AEST
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A smile can open your eyes
Open them as wide as possible
Taking in the surroundings
All 360 degrees of it
Odd, it’s true
Seems we’re trapped in a snow globe
Only the sky holds us in
An endless sky
In an endless circle
So where do we go
When the sky caves in on us
Beginning to snow that fake-ass cheer
Turning our musical key to make us dance
A dance that ended its glory a few years ago
Shaking the world making it downpour ecstatic
While we fake our smile
To all who glance our way
And others eyes are opened
To the snow globe that holds them
Copyright ©
trini
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2006-08-28 08:29:05]
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Re: Snow Globe
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by twbanter on
Monday, 28th August 2006 @ 08:35:30 AM AEST
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Wow, you turned a smile into a confining entity. You're so cruel... Lol (smiling, in puppet like fashion,I think)
Nice contrast, and well written.
Good stuff Trini.
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Re: Snow Globe
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by JockPhillips on
Monday, 28th August 2006 @ 09:40:04 AM AEST
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| A crazy psychedelic nightmare poem here. Good stuff and keep up the strong work for. |
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Re: Snow Globe
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by deadheadpoet on
Monday, 28th August 2006 @ 10:31:52 AM AEST
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Trini, I was quite fixed on your words whilst reading. Interesting perspective. I quite enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing.
Peace, Laura |
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Re: Snow Globe
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by deadheadpoet on
Monday, 28th August 2006 @ 10:31:52 AM AEST
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Trini, I was quite fixed on your words whilst reading. Interesting perspective. I quite enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing.
Peace, Laura |
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Re: Snow Globe
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by Ruby2sdy on
Monday, 28th August 2006 @ 02:18:20 PM AEST
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weird but good! i liked this one too! excellent post, that kind of reminded me of the scene with the snow globe in mary poppins... brill,
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Re: Snow Globe
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by Man_On_High on
Monday, 28th August 2006 @ 06:45:28 PM AEST
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.perhaps we all need to turn our own key;
only then, I've often thought, can we find true, the life and happiness we so deserve.
..provocative and well written Trini~
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Re: Snow Globe
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 28th August 2006 @ 06:56:58 PM AEST
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You weave an intriguing tale, trini.
Extremely thought provoking this is.
"only the sky holds us in"
awesome line .. but there are a brave few, who have
ventured beyond that great barrier ... if only, to
show us that we can.
Great post!
~Breezy
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