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Disabled Mind
Contributed by
deadheadpoet
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Sunday, 27th August 2006 @ 05:34:22 PM in AEST
Topic:
selfstruggles
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Do you think it is easy;
that this is some freakin pleasure ride?
(I'm belted in this seat, man)
(I wish I could step out)
Round and round the block I go
looking for places to hide.
You question, what insanity is.
You think its freaking freedom?
Spit in my face, will you ?
Viperous (female canines) in your
holier than thou kingdoms.
Preaching love and understanding
out of your high priced smeared lipstick
mouths. Your
clouds of thick perfumes
are slowly suffocating me.
My nares burn.
I wish I had not a feeling inside.
I wish I had not a feeling to hide.
I feel your indignation like a spike
as you toil at your job all day.
(as I once did)
Once upon a time when the
foundation beneath was not yet
crumbling
only fractured
to the now dust
it has become.
I've come undone.
(I hear your silent whispers)
Failure.
Medicated
Sedated
You afraid of me.??
Might catch it if ya get too close.
Laughing in the moonlight,
Scream in the sunlight.
Days and nights all fade into one,
Madness.....
And it's all mine.
Laura Horner
8-17-06
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Re: Disabled Mind
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by shelby on
Sunday, 27th August 2006 @ 06:32:41 PM AEST
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Oh laura, I felt this so deeply! You wrote this with such substance and emotion! I'm here for you sis!
Michelle
who thinks Laura's mind is fine and her heart is as wide as the ocean is deep and loves her very much! |
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Re: Disabled Mind
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by Ruby2sdy on
Sunday, 27th August 2006 @ 06:49:37 PM AEST
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im guesin you changed the words to 'freakin' clever missy, very clever indeed! i like this poem, it's interesting, and intricate, and well, honest. good post!
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Re: Disabled Mind
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by frmpoison2static on
Sunday, 27th August 2006 @ 09:27:41 PM AEST
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| enjoyed it very much...i could relate... |
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Re: Disabled Mind
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 27th August 2006 @ 10:35:15 PM AEST
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A potpourri of disabling diseases ... whoooh!
I especially love how ya described a couple of my pet peeves:
"out of your high priced smeared lipstick
mouths. Your
clouds of thick perfumes
are slowly suffocating me."
Fast moving, blunt
scary, oh dreadful
MAD
and ya claim it all!
Enjoyed playin' the writer in this read! Good work, Laura.
wabl
KenMoore
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Re: Disabled Mind
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 28th August 2006 @ 07:06:27 AM AEST
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Wow, so very very powerful with emotion, Laurabeam! ! ! To which I could relate very well.
Awesome poem, lil sis.
*all huge and real like Timbro hug*
Timbro
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Re: Disabled Mind
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by JockPhillips on
Monday, 28th August 2006 @ 10:44:43 AM AEST
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| Another good poem here. I like the work that you do with words and language. My nares burn was favorite line of mine, well placed and succinct. |
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Re: Disabled Mind
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 28th August 2006 @ 07:14:01 PM AEST
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Oh sis .. this was so bloody painful to read!
(I hope you feel better for having got it out).
Exceptional word usage hun .. and so raw!!
And the descriptions were outstanding, especially
the second stanza.
You go girl! Nothing will hold you down EVER!
You have one of the bravest and kindest souls
I've ever known DH. And I am SO very proud
to call you my friend. : ) *hugs you tons*
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Re: Disabled Mind
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by Man_On_High on
Monday, 28th August 2006 @ 10:26:47 PM AEST
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Rife with indignation and bordering on a vendetta..!!
great hate Laura.. Peace to you my friend~
(may you be kind to your adversaries).. lol
..whoever they may be~
Billy |
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Re: Disabled Mind
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by candysears on
Tuesday, 29th August 2006 @ 08:23:54 PM AEST
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This is a very nice write..The emotions just grabs ya!
Great,Excellent work!
Blessings
C.S |
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Re: Disabled Mind
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 5th September 2006 @ 02:01:41 AM AEST
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Well, Bingo, laura. Or should I say, "Ditto"?
What I like most about this is the seething animosity-It is loud and clear, the barely restrained rage, the way you have painted this is so effective. You have a way of eliciting emotions, I find. Maybe It is because I am closer to you in this than others might be, but regardless. The time between your posts is always too long.
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Re: Disabled Mind
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by BobbyZimmerman on
Wednesday, 6th September 2006 @ 08:25:30 PM AEST
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| Totally honest and emotional, loved it, absolutely loved it. It's unfortunate that because some people are prudes, you couldn't fully express yourself in this poem....5 stars anyway! |
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Re: Disabled Mind
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by Uncertain_Oblivion on
Thursday, 14th September 2006 @ 05:04:30 PM AEST
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| WOW!!! WAY TO GO!! I love this so much, it's exactly how I feel and it's said so perfect. I love it, man, I love ya! You're so kick ass. I'm adding you to my buddies list so I can keep watching for your posts...You're my role model. |
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Re: Disabled Mind
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by emystar on
Friday, 6th October 2006 @ 12:41:00 AM AEST
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I hear ya.
Very creativly written.
huggs,
emy |
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