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nick
Contributed by
bennie
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Sunday, 27th August 2006 @ 10:36:51 AM in AEST
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when i look in to your eye's i can see a sunset, when your holding me close it feel's like i would fly away if you let go, every time i would try 2 think i saw you there in side my mind, when i see you smile it's like looking into a sky with star's all around, i would wonder what you think of me when i say i love you.
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Re: nick
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by trini on
Monday, 28th August 2006 @ 09:36:12 AM AEST
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not bad
but i think that your message would be better delivered if you split up the sentances
plus the rhyming would be better recognised
Also when you write poems it's better to leave short form out of it. it was a genuine write and i hope you keep posting ignoring my somewhat "mean" post. it was just ment for help.
good job though :)
-Trini
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Re: nick
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by Sinned on
Monday, 5th January 2009 @ 09:56:12 AM AEST
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You have good ideas here
Your feelings come through strong
I hope you share more with us
believe me your writing will surly improve
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Re: nick
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by ChiChizz on
Tuesday, 10th February 2009 @ 11:20:58 PM AEST
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| Yeah... what they said |
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