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Sunshine
Contributed by
Nirvana12
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Tuesday, 22nd August 2006 @ 04:03:03 PM in AEST
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Sunshine trapped in this bag always gets me high. You'll never know the truth until you try. You've been running around for years in my mind. You know i could never leave you because you're not mine. Everyday it is the same i feel a little more insane. Superman flys above me he's with jesus christ, they both look down here laughing while we wait to die. I would make you happy you would never cry and i swear to you that I would never lie. The bag shines brighter than the heavens up above and the only thing that could complete this would be your love.
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Re: Sunshine
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by trini on
Tuesday, 22nd August 2006 @ 06:06:56 PM AEST
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hey this was good.
i really like the way you captured it
but for future referance try and keep the lines shorter. the rhyming will be better recognised
keep up the good work
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Re: Sunshine
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by secretwind on
Tuesday, 22nd August 2006 @ 10:17:08 PM AEST
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sweet
I like it |
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