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Bleed Red
Contributed by
Inevitable
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Saturday, 19th August 2006 @ 10:42:45 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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They wouldn't know it if I looked
them in the eyes and said it.
You can cut me up and down
and leave the scars
to pacify.
My eyes are raw and concentrated
like lines of a solid nature
the truth bubbles out
expressing me for what I am
you know my naked colors
...still bleed red.
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Inevitable
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2006-08-19 10:42:45]
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Re: Bleed Red
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by PHISHBATES on
Saturday, 19th August 2006 @ 11:23:42 AM AEST
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| I liked it, makes me want to try a short poem. thanks for writtin |
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Re: Bleed Red
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 19th August 2006 @ 11:24:13 AM AEST
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I like this. It's vague with regard to what prompted the words to be set upon the page, but not vague at all in terms of the impact of the same. This line:
My eyes are raw and concentrated
... is telling and relatable (to this reader, I mean). And the whole of the piece leaves me feeling that this write was both necessary and healthy. It's a scream really, and a potent one at that. Well done.
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Re: Bleed Red
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by Cancer on
Saturday, 19th August 2006 @ 01:45:26 PM AEST
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i don't comment much, so i must've liked this to even comment.
i would quote the best, but considering it's brevity and how much i enjoyed it, that would be redundant.
quite good.
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Re: Bleed Red
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by ever1der on
Saturday, 19th August 2006 @ 01:54:59 PM AEST
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I agree with snemmy. It's short but potent and though a bit hard to understand..still, it had impact.
mary |
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Re: Bleed Red
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 19th August 2006 @ 02:20:43 PM AEST
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This is exceptional. I relate so well
to the emotion within~
the ending is perfection .. and absolute!
Excellent post
~Breezy
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Re: Bleed Red
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by secretwind on
Sunday, 20th August 2006 @ 12:05:21 AM AEST
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| wow |
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Re: Bleed Red
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by deadheadpoet on
Wednesday, 23rd August 2006 @ 02:13:31 AM AEST
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I loved this too. I must check out more of your writes. I am in love with the two I've had the pleasure to read, early this morning.
This was short but so darn vivid. So full of hardened truths. Very well written. Thanks for sharing.
Peace, Laura |
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