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Opposing Moment
Contributed by
Man_On_High
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Thursday, 17th August 2006 @ 11:54:05 PM in AEST
Topic:
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The wind swept along the deserted promenade
tossing gulls, screetching and aloft.. as blind and mute
as hieroglyphics in the wet smokey air-
Out towards Nahant, the lighthouse stood,
shrouded in the lonely mist..
I was glad nobody was there,
this scene to share.
The day was brother to my mood-
then sudden, safe along the breakers,
in the dull sand, lay a girl
nestled to a fomidable man; broad shouldered-
he was kissing her throat.
I gazed blindly away to the seething boulders
and the sea's deep bellied-chaff,
offering whatever comfort it could.
A little terrier-skiff was heading bravely east-
sails, full-curved, like a woman's breast-
though even that, gave me no peace.
The sky had a hazy look and serpent-glare..
I turned back my gaze,
lacking you beyond the vast, opposing moment.
near to heart-burst.. and maniacle laugh
Below the crumbling seaweed-wall, the couple were embracing
dim in the heaping mist.. the hooded swirl
of dull-edged foam down the bruised shore.
The man now concealing, the recumbent girl:
her hair wild about her obscured face
in an auburn tangle-
..yet above the roar of chaotic nature did I catch a trace
of half-strangled love and half-primal-pain.
Long past the wake.. in that gull haunted waste,
I stared down at the golden stretch where they had lain.
Billy
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Re: Opposing Moment
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by emystar on
Friday, 18th August 2006 @ 12:57:45 AM AEST
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U my friend, should be writing novels!
U pulled me in to this but left me wanting more.
Very good work.
luv, huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: Opposing Moment
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by jerseysue on
Friday, 18th August 2006 @ 02:17:34 AM AEST
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| I agree with emmy, this could be written in book form. It captures ones attention really well. A very visual and expressive write. I enjoyed it immensley. Thanks for sharing. Sue x |
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Re: Opposing Moment
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by lillyjane on
Friday, 18th August 2006 @ 04:40:30 AM AEST
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| I agree with whats been said, I felt like I was there could see it all in my mind, beautiful. xxxx |
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Re: Opposing Moment
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by wizard on
Friday, 18th August 2006 @ 09:13:49 AM AEST
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amazing write bro...beyond words!!
wiz |
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Re: Opposing Moment
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by thesinner on
Friday, 18th August 2006 @ 01:54:42 PM AEST
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| Your writing is so beautiful .It's always a pleasure to read. |
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Re: Opposing Moment
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 18th August 2006 @ 04:18:31 PM AEST
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God, Billy... I have to echo... This should be published.
You are one of the best writers I have ever had the pleasure of reading.
Gosh, the images I got from this were fantastic.
I am truly stumped at what to say...
Wonderful write, my friend.
*hugs*
Phyllis xxx |
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Re: Opposing Moment
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 18th August 2006 @ 07:05:49 PM AEST
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I am so glad to see this posted, hun. I thought it was impeccable the first
time I read it and it has not lost it's beauty, wonder or surprise since I first felt it.
Your prodigal talent and imagination reach unsurmountable heights at the worst of
times. But this piece has an insight into your soul that no other I've read before
has possessed.
In every single write there is a strength . . something deeper, trying to surface, or to
remain .. of just which one I'm not quite certain. This piece .. is a brilliant example of
just what lies within that magnificent, capable mind .. [and heart]
ever yours~
~Breezy |
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Re: Opposing Moment
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by Fionndruinne on
Friday, 18th August 2006 @ 07:37:05 PM AEST
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Damhna, this is a fine piece, Billy. You've captured the poignance and the pain so well. Beauty mixed so fine with heartbreak that it's impossible to separate them - one of the most potent things we as poets can feel.
The entire scene set, from the inspiring look of seascape to the pull of romance, speaks to me. Uplifting!
Andrew |
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Re: Opposing Moment
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by Leslie on
Friday, 18th August 2006 @ 07:57:54 PM AEST
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| I remember being that young girl on a deserted beach in Maine while visiting my grandmother. As I looked out into the ocean with my boyfriend I wondered if anyone could see us. Maybe, maybe not. Your poem pulled me back to a wondrous time in my youth. Your poem was so well written and I can really picture in my mind a young man looking out from his ship at the young couple on the shore. Your thoughts are concise yet full of emotion and yearning. |
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Re: Opposing Moment
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by brew on
Friday, 18th August 2006 @ 09:07:15 PM AEST
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Just the simplenest of being back with a occuring, dream................Your a talented writer, that gives, others so much, yet it is complex.......Words that flow over one and keeps them yearning for more. Never sop writing, or dreaming..........Always a pleasure to read your work
Good friend forever
Brew~ |
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