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Cube
Contributed by
starry_night
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Thursday, 17th August 2006 @ 08:24:50 PM in AEST
Topic:
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Confined within a perfect space, yet beautiful in its symmetry
More depth, profound than any square
Each side designed with Rubik flair
Lopsided diamonds joined as one, to form dimensions gracefully
Twelve edges touched in parallel
Restrained within a box’s shell
Dense and hollow - words reviled, bandied round by other shapes
Not realising its ability
For holographic imagery
Send me to a universe, defined by pure geometry
Where quadrilateral wishes on
Rhombus stars, my dreams are spun
… cube.
Copyright ©
starry_night
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2006-08-17 20:24:50]
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Re: Cube
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by Man_On_High on
Thursday, 17th August 2006 @ 11:18:48 PM AEST
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Welcome to YPDC-
thank you for this..
Fortunately, I came first.. and I'm surely, not the last..
The sharpest of minds, even by the greatest shard, have seldom come to this.
And though, I don't often use words such as, brilliant or genius.. both would apply here.. and in that order. Thanks again-
Wating for more-
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Re: Cube
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by lostinmyself on
Friday, 18th August 2006 @ 04:46:40 PM AEST
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Wow, this is different.
I'm not entirely sure what to make of it.
It;s good, anyway, I like how it's set out and how it makes me think.
Good write,
Phil xxx |
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Re: Cube
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by sadaddy on
Wednesday, 23rd August 2006 @ 07:42:08 AM AEST
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What an amazing first write you have put together here. Excellent Job and keep them coming. Look forward to your next one.
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Re: Cube
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by Spike on
Monday, 28th August 2006 @ 05:40:45 AM AEST
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Couldn't wait. Meticulous construction, hypnotic and smooth as silk, and such imagery! What a wonderful perspective you have (no pun intended).
The concept of bullying among the shapes had never occurred to me until this read - poor dull, oafish cube, you have more depth and capacity than all those flatliners.
more please,
Spike
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Re: Cube
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 29th August 2006 @ 12:14:06 PM AEST
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Congratulations, Jan. You have recieved, on this post, praise from two of probably the five main masters of words on ypdc (in my opinion). I agree wholeheartedly with their comments. As soon as Spike, Breezy and Nazmythian post their comments, ya got all five! All this cowboy poet has to add is, bring on more of this magnificent writing! After readin' this write, I'm sittin' here wishin' the world was cubic! Wekcome to ypdc.
wabl
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Re: Cube
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 29th August 2006 @ 12:48:14 PM AEST
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Whoops. Spike already commented and that number ain't five, it's four. Surely there are five or more, but these four are (again in my opinion) in a class of their own. It was a "senior cowboy moment" on my first comment.
wabl
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Re: Cube
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 2nd September 2006 @ 06:59:05 PM AEST
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I am almost too humbled to comment here .. (after
ken's far too generous mentiont .. thank you for that, ken)
but .. I can't NOT say how much I truly enjoyed this.
With each line .. with each stanza I thought, now
this is the one that gets to me .. but NO!
I was captivated right through to the end.
Excellent first post. Truly a masterpiece.
his write and the
CUBE...
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Re: Cube
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by ever1der on
Monday, 4th September 2006 @ 03:24:34 AM AEST
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I am so dense as to think of diamonds and rings..lol.
hmmm...restraind? kept in the box; I wonder why..odd the things I think of... |
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Re: Cube
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by secretwind on
Monday, 4th September 2006 @ 11:21:05 AM AEST
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WOW
Deep InnerVision
I dig the way it flowed |
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Re: Cube
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 26th September 2006 @ 03:33:02 AM AEST
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Very beautifull, starry nite.
huggs, big smiles,
emystar |
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Re: Cube
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by Rakerman1999 on
Friday, 27th October 2006 @ 05:07:20 PM AEST
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Years ago, I read a poem from a poetess called Dreamweaver.
I was astounded by the beauty and poetic prowess right off.....and now, years later, I am still gobsmacked by her ( your) words. Roses at your feet
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Re: Cube
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by NDean on
Sunday, 10th December 2006 @ 08:38:55 AM AEST
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I have no idea what this poem means and that means I like it even more. Cool Poem. It flows and the words used I have never seen used so well in a poem. Rhombus???? Wow.
Well Done
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Re: Cube
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by Errious on
Sunday, 10th December 2006 @ 11:03:28 AM AEST
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Cool! Very contraversial poem. Never seen a poem written like that before. Well done.
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Re: Cube
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by venkat on
Friday, 23rd February 2007 @ 03:47:58 AM AEST
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I returned after two years gap..and found this "cube" accidentally..
Why did you stop with only one poem?''
respectfully-
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Re: Cube
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 25th April 2007 @ 03:29:26 PM AEST
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beautifully exquisite!
love n' hugs nessa
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Re: Cube
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by Wachumiri on
Wednesday, 5th December 2007 @ 05:15:38 PM AEST
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I like your style. You dive into the poem, without hesitation, immerse yourself in it, writing all you will with great skill, and then ending it as abruptly, with grace.
Well done.
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Re: Cube
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by emystar on
Wednesday, 12th December 2007 @ 02:53:10 PM AEST
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Well I read this again and slower.
each time I reread it I shines a litty bit more.
Keep shinen stary night.
Huggs,
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Re: Cube
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by zenith66 on
Saturday, 23rd February 2008 @ 06:58:01 PM AEST
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i was blown away by this. teh uniqeness of the whole things and the wonderfull imagery gave it a perplexingly brilliant feel. such rubik flair...lol..i hope to see more from you soon because this is a cut above the ordinary
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