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The Pain
Contributed by
SAND-WIND-GHOST-OF-SORROW
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Thursday, 17th August 2006 @ 08:08:34 PM in AEST
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There is no day nor night that passz by that i dont think about you....
My Love My Hate.....My Joy My Sorrow.....
Like the beutiful sands of the desert the blowing winds of the north
the ghost of your past the sorrow of your joy....
and as i listen to the silence i feel alone in the dark cant reach the light...
I am all the pian in you I am all the sadness in your heart I am a monster made of sorrow.....
sinkin into the sadness of my despair makeing me yell and dare all the people around me
are scared of my monster made of despair...
NOTE:it seems there is somethin wrong in it but i cant put my finger on it ....i dont think its finished yet but at the same time i do
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Re: The Pain
(User Rating: 1 ) by HeArTbRoKEnGiRl on
Thursday, 17th August 2006 @ 09:19:51 PM AEST (User
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wow, this is good. there is a wonderful use of imagery! my favorite lines are," Like the beautiful sands of the desert the blowing winds of the north the ghost of your past the sorrow of your joy" idk what it is about them, but they're my favs lol. the whole poem was great though!
good job & keep writing,
~*~Hailee~*~
btw, i have a poem that i want u to read, so i'll send it to u later k? |
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Re: The Pain
(User Rating: 1 ) by chaos78 on
Thursday, 17th August 2006 @ 10:24:02 PM AEST (User
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good poem spelling off but still good thanks for sharing |
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