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Murder me!
Contributed by
Immortal-Dragon21
on
Thursday, 17th August 2006 @ 08:46:44 AM in AEST
Topic:
LostLove
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Murder Me!
You spoke such beauty in the words you said
Forever & always those were the words
I thought this would last for eternity
I never knew forever came this quick
Now it is clear I was so blind
Your worthless to me just a waste of my time
So burn & choke on your lies
You were so perfect but now you’re stained
And when the sun rises you start over
Not this time, not tonight
No longer will you commit these sins
I won’t let you
Die! You *****, for what you did
I’ll strangle the beauty from your eyes
Die! You *****, you killed me
Now together in death forever we’ll be
Copyright ©
Immortal-Dragon21
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2006-08-17 08:46:44]
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Re: Murder me!
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by WorthlesSanity666 on
Thursday, 17th August 2006 @ 09:33:49 AM AEST
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I liked the theme, but I think you could make this even stronger than it already is. I liked the last 2 lines most.
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Re: Murder me!
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by Metikulus on
Thursday, 17th August 2006 @ 03:43:08 PM AEST
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| nice job...beautiful piece of art |
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Re: Murder me!
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by shinji_kusa on
Friday, 18th August 2006 @ 05:06:17 PM AEST
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thats awesome lol, revenge is a personal fave of mine!
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Re: Murder me!
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by Soccerflyer27 on
Tuesday, 22nd August 2006 @ 10:11:31 AM AEST
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| This is a really powerful poem. It expresses a lot of emotions you feel when you're in this kind of situation: Anger, frustration, and sadness. Great Job! |
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