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My Dark Secret
Contributed by
SAND-WIND-GHOST-OF-SORROW
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Wednesday, 16th August 2006 @ 06:43:09 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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its too good to be true...
its seems that some people are perfect..
too perfect..no one is to begin with
everyone hides beneath the lies.. everyone has a dark past
a dark history...hmm what have I done...am i a monster?
i feel like crying but the tears won't come out..
is my heart that cold...did my tears dry out....don't i have a soul?
i have no love nor passion in this life that i live...
my heart is full of pain and sorrow...in the end it will destroy me...
am i going to heaven or hell..no one knows..only god knows
i hope to go to heaven... but i still want to go to hell.......
because of this dark secret that i have...
that will tell who i really am.....
that will show my hidden monster of sorrow and pain.....
am i going to die in vain??
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2006-08-16 18:43:09]
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Re: My Dark Secret
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by Jackman on
Wednesday, 16th August 2006 @ 09:30:46 PM AEST
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hey, this is a really good first write. the line "i feel like crying but the tears won't come out" is beautiful and i can totally relate. for your second piece, i think that if you tried to stay focused on one part of how you feel then you could create a really powerful poem.
peace,
jack
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Re: My Dark Secret
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by chaos78 on
Wednesday, 16th August 2006 @ 11:13:24 PM AEST
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| i agree this is a good write look foreward to reading more thanks 4 sharing |
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