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Seduced by Suicide
Contributed by
HeArTbRoKEnGiRl
on
Thursday, 10th August 2006 @ 06:08:47 PM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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She's sleeping awake and choking on a dream
a dream where all is nothing and nothing is what it seems
Her life's a tragic love story
Her heart is currently broken
watch her in all her glory
Her smile is fake and its so well spoken
Tonight her heart is cold
lost in all your lies
and those shallow replies
tonight she'll just get lost in your eyes
and hear your transparent cries
the saddest part of a broken heart
isn't the ending so much as the start
the tragedy erupts at the very first spark...
losing your mind for the sake of your heart
Eventually she was obsolete
with nothing to do
but cry herself to sleep
the happiness is all but real
empty silence with cries she concealed
the insomnia tends to keep her awake at night...
too scared to breathe... so full of fright
she's smiling... she looks happy
but then again, nothing is what it seems
Courted by corruption
blessed by blasphemy
persuaded by perfection
wooed by woe
seduced by suicide
she's sleeping awake and choking on a dream
Copyright ©
HeArTbRoKEnGiRl
... [
2006-08-10 18:08:47]
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Re: Seduced by Suicide
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by Syloss on
Thursday, 10th August 2006 @ 08:30:01 PM AEST
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This is the kind of raw poetry I love!!!
Thank you and great write!!!! |
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Re: Seduced by Suicide
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by chaos78 on
Thursday, 10th August 2006 @ 11:34:02 PM AEST
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| i agree this is just good writing good job |
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Re: Seduced by Suicide
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by The_Unknown on
Friday, 11th August 2006 @ 06:19:08 PM AEST
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this is a really good poem. keep it up!
luvs ya!
~*Jess*~ |
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Re: Seduced by Suicide
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by lyric5 on
Tuesday, 21st September 2010 @ 11:49:15 AM AEST
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| you have some great themes here but i would suggest you remove the rhyme scheme. i always thought that makes any poem appear elementary. of course its fine to rhyme every once and a while throughout the poem. good themes and descriptions. |
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