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SMILE
Contributed by
silent
on
Thursday, 10th August 2006 @ 09:38:14 AM in AEST
Topic:
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Try to delude yourself once again
Find someone or something else to take the blame
No one can see inside, this monstrous rage and pitch black pain
Tis a clouded shadow of acid rain
Pouring down and burning trees, beautiful things and memories
Feeling so much compassion, love and tears
Realisation dawns that all these fears, are forever burned
Within my mind, to never show
To scream and tear apart my being
Burn me out of existence, like flames of hell
That's the acid rain I smell, feel and taste
My life I know is such a waste
A prison of solitary I sit within
Staring through blue eyes I grin
Whilst children play in acid rain....
Copyright ©
silent
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2006-08-10 09:38:14]
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Re: SMILE
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by emystar on
Thursday, 10th August 2006 @ 11:12:44 AM AEST
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Very sad but well written.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: SMILE
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 10th August 2006 @ 02:33:56 PM AEST
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| Very dark. Good write thanks for sharing! I like the ending by the way its very creepy but it fits well. good job! |
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Re: SMILE
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by frmpoison2static on
Thursday, 10th August 2006 @ 03:36:31 PM AEST
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| excellent..i liked the reference to the acid rain..sad and well written. |
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Re: SMILE
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by Siri_Holm on
Thursday, 10th August 2006 @ 04:18:51 PM AEST
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| Beautiful! |
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Re: SMILE
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by Anesthetic on
Thursday, 10th August 2006 @ 09:55:05 PM AEST
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that was awesome, loved the end it worked so well. keep up the great work.
~Anesthetic~ |
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