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Crimson tsunami
Contributed by
True
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Wednesday, 2nd August 2006 @ 11:32:51 PM in AEST
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Hide me in darkness
Wrap myself in soothing stillness
Let sleep rub the itching from my eyes
My heart is aching
A thorn stabbing deeper
Leaving scar tissue
And crimson drops of blood
My pillow is soggy
Too many nights
Weeping myself to sleep
Seduce me with your calming words
And gentle lies
Slash my heart
To remove the thorn
Let the blood flow
A crimson tsunami
Wash me in blood
Cleanse me from pain
Let the soothing warmth
Of eternal sleep
Steal me away
On a warm flowing river of red
at least then
I won't feel so cold
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Re: Crimson tsunami
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by chaos78 on
Wednesday, 2nd August 2006 @ 11:58:19 PM AEST
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| i like the write thanks 4 sharing |
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Re: Crimson tsunami
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 3rd August 2006 @ 12:36:36 AM AEST
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Dark, and you know while some people, may have to go through, an undescribable amount of pain, suicides never an answer, nor should it be a thought. Though, i get, it cant be helped, and where youre coming from. Things can get to the point where youre just so overwhelmed and sick of all the ***** going on, you want it over, and as you said, no matter what lengths you must go to to reach that release. But you have to realize, the pain you spread with that solution. And that there are always others who are willing to listen, and lend a hand if it is anyway possible.
You just need to keep your chin up, and rise above it. Because things could always be worse, and even though, it'll seem like it couldnt be, it can. Remember its better to ask for a hand than to let yourself fall beneath the water.
Smile, just be strong, and push through. You can always thrive above the worst times with friends standing beside you.
Very nice write.
-Cassy |
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Re: Crimson tsunami
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by Davinah on
Thursday, 3rd August 2006 @ 01:31:12 AM AEST
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Very beautifully written. I like it a lot!
~D~ |
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Re: Crimson tsunami
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by doug on
Thursday, 3rd August 2006 @ 08:41:44 AM AEST
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I know many people have different definitions
of the word , my own is quite vague , but this
feels almost gothic to me. I think you may have also given me an idea for a poem.
Inspiration blesses the pen once again ,
actually it blesses the keyboard but that does'nt sound as good. Loved this poem.
truly , Doug |
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Re: Crimson tsunami
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by midian on
Friday, 4th August 2006 @ 04:17:14 AM AEST
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"Such is the torment that we feel on occasion that our mind is clouded and therefore our judgement is too, never underestimate the true value of yourself there are too many people ready and willing to hurt you without you hurting yourself with what you think"...
~carly~
i hope you no longer feel the pain that caused this beautifal piece of work
"On a warm flowing river of red" i particulally liked this line as i thought i t showed a warm sense of dispare. |
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Re: Crimson tsunami
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by Man_On_High on
Wednesday, 9th August 2006 @ 12:08:07 AM AEST
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very direct.. and with much pain~
..well written-
Peace-
Billy |
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Re: Crimson tsunami
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by lord_sogi on
Thursday, 17th August 2006 @ 01:54:21 PM AEST
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| A very cliched subject, but alas your words eliminate that. You have a nice way with words, and all of the scenes you describe are truly picturesque. Definitely takes the reader into the mind of a pained person and the release that they seek, or actually the warmth they seek that they have been deprived from in life, which we all experience at some time in life. It is beautifully done. |
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Re: Crimson tsunami
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 10th December 2008 @ 09:19:23 AM AEST
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yes, i've certainly felt like this. a thorn in the heart is the perfect expression, something small but incredibly destructive and painful. very good write.
-phil |
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