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You Say
Contributed by
spencer
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Friday, 28th July 2006 @ 10:24:30 AM in AEST
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You say i'm no good to work with
You say i'm no use to any of you
You say all my efforts are useless
You say you all want me to leave
I say it's hard for an eagle to saw when
it's working with turkeys. Soon i will saw
leaving all you turkeys to the buchers
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2006-07-28 10:24:30]
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Re: You Say
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by alecfernadez on
Friday, 28th July 2006 @ 10:54:16 AM AEST
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interesting concept and good use of metaphor. However I suggest using spell check, I know it sounds nasty, but it puts you off reading. Soar - Saw. Good effort, short but sweet. Its good to write these kind of poems to get demons outta ya system.
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Re: You Say
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by Lionel on
Friday, 28th July 2006 @ 11:57:26 AM AEST
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| I'm sure the poem is from the heart but, I wonder: seems like the problem may lie with the poet....Nah.... everyone else is wrong. But on the other hand; the mote is always easier to see than the beam. We're all subject to this failing. You do have poetic potential though. God bless |
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Re: You Say
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by Balmain_Tiger on
Saturday, 29th July 2006 @ 03:01:24 AM AEST
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| Your writing is short sweet and to the point. A good effor. You need to keep working on your technique. Too much thought can get you in trouble, but so too can not enough. |
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Re: You Say
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by topcatcrowther on
Wednesday, 6th September 2006 @ 10:44:31 AM AEST
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| I like this peom, it's funny Good one spence, read my new peom. |
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Re: You Say
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by LonelyPoet on
Friday, 22nd September 2006 @ 12:05:26 PM AEST
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| I love your use of comparisons..this poem works for me!! |
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Re: You Say
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by StormyNites on
Friday, 22nd September 2006 @ 01:13:34 PM AEST
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| Well said !! I hoep those fellows read this !! |
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Re: You Say
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by spencer on
Tuesday, 26th September 2006 @ 07:36:37 AM AEST
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I AM WELL AWARE I MADE A FATAL SPELLING MISTAKE ON THIS POEM, I HAVE DYSLEXIA THUS SPELLING IS DIFFICULT FOR ME. BUT THE MESSAGE IS STILL CLEAR.
authers note |
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