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~*A Slight Fracture In My Heart*~
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eternal_dreamer
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Thursday, 27th July 2006 @ 09:52:00 PM in AEST
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With open hands I prayed to God
In desperation I made my plea
My heart a replica of fragile glass
A slight fracture within it you’ll see
My tears fall from weary eyes
A smudged illusion now is cast
Memories of a tormented heart
Stir up emotions from the past
A journey into my world inside
You’ll see my veins slowly seep
The extreme struggle to survive
Brings my aching heart to weep
Passively catching every breath
I fought so hard all these years
The havoc you recked into my life
Led to ample amounts of tears
Underneath the heavy blackened sky
I slowly knelt down on bended knee
With empty hands I prayed to God
To mend the slight fracture within me
By Sue Mina 21/07/2006
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2006-07-27 21:52:00]
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Re: ~*A Slight Fracture In My Heart*~
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by Rhei76 on
Thursday, 27th July 2006 @ 10:04:01 PM AEST
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Love the write.
It sounds like you have the strength, to learn the time with open hands.
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Re: ~*A Slight Fracture In My Heart*~
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by emystar on
Thursday, 27th July 2006 @ 11:33:49 PM AEST
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Very sad but well written.
My dear friend, I certainly can relate to this but mine has been more than cracked over the years. Still I survied it all.
Hang tuff as joy cometh in the morning.
luv, huggs, prayer,
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Re: ~*A Slight Fracture In My Heart*~
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by jerseysue on
Thursday, 27th July 2006 @ 11:36:47 PM AEST
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Sue that is a beautifully written poem. You have put your feelings into words.It displays your hurt, and your will to survive it. A truly heartfelt piece. Sue x
Hearts and souls can be broken,
But time as the healer will show,
That a good heart can be repaired,
Believe it, I am someone who knows,
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Re: ~*A Slight Fracture In My Heart*~
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by kttykttywfreckls on
Friday, 28th July 2006 @ 02:03:07 AM AEST
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| I really like this I can relate. Very good write. And time does heal. |
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Re: ~*A Slight Fracture In My Heart*~
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by Jenni_K on
Friday, 28th July 2006 @ 07:08:31 AM AEST
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Thank you for sharing your heart with us.. A truly heart felt write. Hope it heals soon..
Hugs
Jenni |
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Re: ~*A Slight Fracture In My Heart*~
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by shelby on
Friday, 28th July 2006 @ 02:19:27 PM AEST
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Sue, this is so sad, touched me to my inner core. Your a strong woman and I see within your words you have such strength. Im so impressed with the amount you deal with and keep standing on two feet not to be defeated. I admire you my dear sweet friend.
I added you to my messenger and am but a pm away. Whatever I can to to help I will.
Love you hun
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Re: ~*A Slight Fracture In My Heart*~
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by Ramfire on
Friday, 28th July 2006 @ 07:14:01 PM AEST
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Your poem touches my heart. It's so easy to be hurt when you love somebody.
Ramfire |
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Re: ~*A Slight Fracture In My Heart*~
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 28th July 2006 @ 07:31:41 PM AEST
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Quite beautiful in own sad way sue, so much the heart must take and even longer 2 heal, i'm sorry 4 your pain, yet love can heal as well as hurt wise you are 2 give it time while u create these never ending trausure 4 us 2 read.
(((((Sue)))))
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Re: ~*A Slight Fracture In My Heart*~
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by Former_Member on
Friday, 28th July 2006 @ 07:32:01 PM AEST
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(((((((((( Susie Q From Across the Blue ))))))))))
Your poem is beautifully written. You write about pain yet do it in wonderful metaphors and a breeze of flowing poetic verse.
And yep, those emotions can dig deep, being hurt by the one we love so much. I can certainly relate.
Very well penned.
Tim
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Re: ~*A Slight Fracture In My Heart*~
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 31st July 2006 @ 03:50:17 PM AEST
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| ahhh the echo of it still resounds within me...... |
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Re: ~*A Slight Fracture In My Heart*~
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by Man_On_High on
Monday, 31st July 2006 @ 08:58:25 PM AEST
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Sue..
I am at a loss for words as you have penned for my delight, an account of all my day and all my night-
I love this beyond anything I've read (that might be relevant to me,) in recent years..
it's painful to read it.. and so I hope your pain dies, finally and forever as well, my friend.
Warm and tender affection to you my friend~
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Re: ~*A Slight Fracture In My Heart*~
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by RLWildPassions on
Tuesday, 1st August 2006 @ 05:00:15 PM AEST
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| sad though it is, your poem pictures well, images... pain... keep writing, so your heart cannot fester blisters... scars, God will take away... let him.. huggies...rl |
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Re: ~*A Slight Fracture In My Heart*~
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by CrimsonTears on
Tuesday, 1st August 2006 @ 11:11:19 PM AEST
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this is truly an amazin write....great work...i loved it soo much
x0x
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Re: ~*A Slight Fracture In My Heart*~
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by lovingcritters on
Wednesday, 2nd August 2006 @ 09:46:38 PM AEST
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My dear sweet friend Susie Q,
I feel your painful heart, and the depth of it too! When one falls down and prays to their God.......He too will feel your sadness and for this you can applaud. How privileged we are to be able to pray, and cast all our pains on He that loves us so much!
He will never let you totter dear Susie, hand on tight to his Hand......he will always be there for you.
And so will I dear Susie Q
Warm love
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Re: ~*A Slight Fracture In My Heart*~
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by Lilly-Quill on
Thursday, 10th August 2006 @ 03:09:59 PM AEST
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It would appear that I've been down a similar hallway of a Fractured Heart, dear Susie Q. And yet I doubt that few could ascribe or related it any better than this eloquent muse. Masterfully brilliant~, special friend.
May Wisdom, the Word, His Highest supreme, and the Holy Angels step in to intervene “as you lift open palms to Heaven~ releasing all wounds and pain.” |
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Re: ~*A Slight Fracture In My Heart*~
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by Spike on
Friday, 1st September 2006 @ 07:41:00 AM AEST
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Sue, a very emotional poem, just overfull with sadness. Those injuries certainly go deep, and never seem to completely heal, which is probably how its meant to be.
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Re: ~*A Slight Fracture In My Heart*~
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 24th September 2006 @ 01:03:40 PM AEST
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Even the slightest fracture causes deep pain.You have captured ,in beautiful verse,what many have felt and will feel,
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Re: ~*A Slight Fracture In My Heart*~
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by Oneir8dude on
Friday, 29th September 2006 @ 11:51:04 PM AEST
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Sue,
Anyone with talent and strength as you, can get
thru a broken heart... Your words are beautiful...
Your style shows grace... Your heart mends already...
Your friend if you need to talk...
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Re: ~*A Slight Fracture In My Heart*~
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by yangdantien on
Monday, 30th October 2006 @ 10:44:51 PM AEST
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Thank You for your comments. I really enjoy this site and find the like minded and shared elements, themes that blossom in everyones effort. Your writing is literate and aphoristic. I see the effort taking shape each of yours that I have read expresses hope and your good character. In my humble opinion this piece lives and breathes as a prayer it self.
Peace
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Re: ~*A Slight Fracture In My Heart*~
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by MisfitMe on
Saturday, 9th December 2006 @ 06:30:41 PM AEST
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Fracture=crack, as defined here: Breaking w/o separating into pieces.
I think we can find a little of this definition in all of us...& maybe a bit more in the poetic soul.
BigLoveMuchPeace,
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Re: ~*A Slight Fracture In My Heart*~
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by myheartsvoice on
Sunday, 28th January 2007 @ 07:37:17 PM AEST
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This is a strong poem with lots of depth. One never knows what is instored for us, especially when it comes to matters of the heart. A most lovely write never the less. much peace to you.
thank you also for your comment.
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Re: ~*A Slight Fracture In My Heart*~
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by Wachumiri on
Sunday, 18th March 2007 @ 11:24:48 PM AEST
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This is good. A peaceful, calm, and beautiful piece.
Take care,
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Re: ~*A Slight Fracture In My Heart*~
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by ladyfawn on
Wednesday, 25th April 2007 @ 03:42:57 PM AEST
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beautifully expressed feelings...
love n' hugs nessa |
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