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HER LAST BREATHS
Contributed by
Adelle
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Sunday, 23rd July 2006 @ 06:32:28 PM in AEST
Topic:
goodbyepoetry
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All alone, a stranger
in the night’s silence, I sat by her
in the quiet hours
while taking her last breathers
steadily back in and back out
I listened to the sounding’s muffled cloud
of the moans and groans
and the gargles in her lungs
in the wee hours of the night
taking care of her last needs, was I
in any possible way, being her comforter
while heaven readied to take her
in the chair, on the floor
by her bed, by the door
I moved around
in the silence of her sounds
trying to stay awake
to be aware if she goes on her way
heavy weighted were my eyes
yet heavy burdened were her cries
keeping me awake in the silence of the night
there, watching her last moments of life,
when the sudden moments of her last breaths did arrive,
I watched the patterns of her breaths in fright-
sounding like muffled chains
short double quickened breaths of pain
silent moans and groans
and the sound of gargling fluid filling her lungs
in a quickening moment, her breath was gone
panicking, jumping to my feet running to the phone
and there I stood in the drafts of shock
as a wind upon me did knock
causing me to turn around, for there she was
alert, wide eyed, breathing through her lungs
spooked, chilled, shocked
towards her bed I walked
as I watched her take her last breaths
taking her to where her life ends-
her heart again stopped
for several moments long
to only beat a few more minutes before she was gone
then she closed her eyes shut, as her body shut down
gone, stiffened, cold
her body, suddenly empty and hollow
in love and freedom,
tenderly, and steadily, she was gone
she is now flying free
in her new life’s beginning
released from the captivity
of the weight and chains from her body
a hostage kept, ever sickening
to the very day, she went flying free
she overcome all of life’s adversity
and entered a new life of embracing for she-
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good bye Ardis, it was a pleasure to serve you, and an honor to learn about you and to feel your amazing, sweet, and courageous spirit. Thank you for the gift of being able to be with you while you took your last breath
SHANNA HUNTSMAN 07-23-06
Copyright ©
Adelle
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2006-07-23 18:32:28]
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Re: HER LAST BREATHS
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by Hannah_Heaven on
Sunday, 23rd July 2006 @ 06:42:01 PM AEST
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being serious this made me feel so sad .. i hate death as it leaves us without the ones we love .. but in a way .. there always there .. watching over us as we take out last breathes
this was really a lovely poem and i loved the way you detailed it to the last breathe she struggled to hold on to .. but at least she was at peace of freed into heaven ... loved every second of the words .. so fluent .. thank you xx han |
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Re: HER LAST BREATHS
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by xxbreathlessx on
Sunday, 23rd July 2006 @ 08:57:36 PM AEST
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| thank you for having the courage to talk about expierecing a death, it must be hard. this poem flows with grace and sadness. a well written write! |
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Re: HER LAST BREATHS
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by lillyjane on
Monday, 24th July 2006 @ 10:35:32 AM AEST
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As I read this could feel my heart pounding your description of her last breaths made me feel I was there, its beautiful, sad but in a way happy she is free at last..xxx
It was also nice to think she had you with her at the end. |
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Re: HER LAST BREATHS
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by kttykttywfreckls on
Monday, 24th July 2006 @ 02:12:48 PM AEST
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| This is an excellent write. You did a wonderful job, and your compasion and respect for Ardis is admirable. |
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