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Seven Deadly Sins ( of love I shall amend )
Contributed by
doug
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Sunday, 23rd July 2006 @ 01:26:09 PM in AEST
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Had I Kindness instead of Wrath
I would've held you closer
Humility in place of Pride-
I would've said I'm wrong
Generosity instead of Greed-
I'd give back all I've taken
I'd give you Zeal in place of Sloth
and struggle for this bond
I owe you Dignity , not Lust alone-
I shall covet your thoughts as well
I'll give this Envy up for Love -
give you Heaven in place of Hell
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doug
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2006-07-23 13:26:09]
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Re: Seven Deadly Sins ( of love I shall amend )
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by Keilantra on
Sunday, 23rd July 2006 @ 02:32:31 PM AEST
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this is a very potetnet poem that many can take differently, but in the end, we all the get tthe same outcoem. There are always times when we regret how we may have acted and wsh we could have gone back. i really enjoyed that you were ble to protray that so beautifully. There isnt just one part that sticks out, the entire thing is an emotional masterpiece.
xXx
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Re: Seven Deadly Sins ( of love I shall amend )
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by fielding88 on
Sunday, 23rd July 2006 @ 03:56:28 PM AEST
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| This was neat, and you put it together with an original touch. I enjoyed it, thanks for posting |
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Re: Seven Deadly Sins ( of love I shall amend )
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by True on
Sunday, 23rd July 2006 @ 09:21:14 PM AEST
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| Nice, I think the experiment turned out well. |
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Re: Seven Deadly Sins ( of love I shall amend )
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Monday, 24th July 2006 @ 12:11:27 AM AEST
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Doug~
A most precious and beautifully written piece of poetry. You have done a fine job with this write. Definately a Hallmark moment~
well done.
warm hugs,
sue m |
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Re: Seven Deadly Sins ( of love I shall amend )
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by epsftbllchic1617 on
Monday, 24th July 2006 @ 01:32:40 PM AEST
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| Very creative, we all feel like we could have done more in a relationship sometimes. |
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Re: Seven Deadly Sins ( of love I shall amend )
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by kttykttywfreckls on
Wednesday, 26th July 2006 @ 12:37:29 PM AEST
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| good write, keep up the good work.... |
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