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Forever Rest
Contributed by
sride686
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Sunday, 23rd July 2006 @ 07:41:41 AM in AEST
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Life is so short with death in my midst
I feel it so strong with my life in its grip
Pain from my hate a weakness so cold
Pain in my heart that rips out my soul
A clock of darkness a shadow of death
Darkness in life in its forever rest
A mystical mist a haze so cold
That comes for your heart to control your soul
Waters of life that flow to your death
Whispers of lies as your heart lies to rest
Drops so cold that run down my face
Vivid dreams of a life that I waste
Whispers of silence come touch my soul
Consume this hurt that rips out my soul
Close my eyes and lay me to rest
To forever sleep alone in my death
~Steve~
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Re: Forever Rest
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by deadclown on
Sunday, 23rd July 2006 @ 08:10:25 AM AEST
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Really sad poem. Can picture you writing this with your head in your hands with so many questions and doubts in your mind. If this is based on true feelins, then I'm sorry for you.
Take care. Great poem |
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Re: Forever Rest
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by jono on
Sunday, 23rd July 2006 @ 10:39:40 AM AEST
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| welcome back good poem |
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Re: Forever Rest
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by kttykttywfreckls on
Sunday, 23rd July 2006 @ 02:02:42 PM AEST
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| death will come. but peace is here also you must seek it and allow it to wash you in its quiet...... |
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Re: Forever Rest
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by fielding88 on
Sunday, 23rd July 2006 @ 04:12:25 PM AEST
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| Pretty good, nice ideas and everything. I'm not too sure about the last stanza's first two lines though, which end with the same word. Otherwise nice work. |
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Re: Forever Rest
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by Vampirequeen on
Monday, 24th July 2006 @ 12:14:19 AM AEST
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wow Steve what a deep write
hope your doing ok?
hugs
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Re: Forever Rest
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by suicidal_imbecile on
Thursday, 27th July 2006 @ 08:54:02 PM AEST
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hey steve, kate here. damn you still write some intense poetry. this past year has made me have a better outlook on life, i hope you can find it within yourself to be at peace also..
your friend
kate |
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