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Discontented
Contributed by
Merry
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Saturday, 22nd July 2006 @ 05:46:39 PM in AEST
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Lifepoems
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Short staccato messages
Slipped under the door
I smile when I read them
Picture you naked and pleased
Laugh at our foolish desires
Such folly will get us into trouble my dear
But we are two sides of one coin
Danger and excitement fuel our senses
How long have we dallied in the garden
How long before they notice we’re gone
You whisper – who cares - in my ear
Short staccato messages
A litany of our sins without tears
Trying to accept contentment
A daily routine we survive
But it only lasts a short while
Until our restless hearts yearn
For so much more than we have
Copyright ©
Merry
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2006-07-22 17:46:39]
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Re: Discontented
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by xxbreathlessx on
Saturday, 22nd July 2006 @ 08:20:04 PM AEST
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| i'd say this is bittersweet and well written! good job! |
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Re: Discontented
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by Unbreakable on
Saturday, 22nd July 2006 @ 10:00:31 PM AEST
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I love your choice of words. It seems so elegant, but sneaky and daring at the same time. Powerful combination. Great write
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Re: Discontented
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by kttykttywfreckls on
Sunday, 23rd July 2006 @ 03:39:01 PM AEST
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lovely and passionate
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Re: Discontented
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by Spike on
Thursday, 27th July 2006 @ 06:54:06 AM AEST
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Ah, Merry, again weaving the prosaic and mundane into magic. Dangerous liasons and the unfillable heart.
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Re: Discontented
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by Rakerman1999 on
Friday, 27th October 2006 @ 04:50:45 PM AEST
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"But we are two sides of one coin
Danger and excitement fuel our senses
How long have we dallied in the garden
How long before they notice we’re gone
You whisper – who cares - in my ear"
I could read until I was 100 and never come across a more perfect verse than this.
I've said it before..I say it now....you are the BEST free verse writer.
Roses at my daisies feet
Larry
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