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V3
Contributed by
Immortal-Dragon21
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Saturday, 22nd July 2006 @ 02:20:07 AM in AEST
Topic:
Suicide
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V3
A small room in a small apartment
A small pill and small bottle
Barbiturates to bring sleep
And Diazepam to calm
A weary body
Finding everlasting refuge from
This ugly yet beautiful world
In the bottom of a bottle
As the quiet calm sets in
The lights grow dim
The breathing slows and heart rate falls
Before long numbness sets in
And the cold embrace holds close
Whispers requiems and singing
A lamenting melody
For such a lethal cocktail is that of V3
Of Valium, Vicodin & Vodka
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Immortal-Dragon21
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2006-07-22 02:20:07]
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Re: V3
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by jono on
Saturday, 22nd July 2006 @ 04:00:56 AM AEST
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| Well done I'm amazed someone of your age can have such talent |
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Re: V3
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by drtylilsecret on
Saturday, 22nd July 2006 @ 08:50:41 AM AEST
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wow, great write, loved the mood you were setting. depressing, dark, fantastic.
~natalya |
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Re: V3
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by deadheadpoet on
Saturday, 22nd July 2006 @ 11:01:55 AM AEST
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I don't usually read or comment on Suicide Poetry. When I was young, I had some times when I felt this world was too damn much. Now I'm 42 and happy to be alive. Your poem took me back years, to loneliness so friggen deep. I could feel the suffocating air of that small apartment, I could feel the heaviness of life in the air. Definitely a good write. Wow.
Peace, Laura (that is one hell of a cocktail) |
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Re: V3
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by Silent-No-More on
Saturday, 22nd July 2006 @ 11:38:32 AM AEST
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Those that cannot imagine feeling suicidal or that only ever get a very vague, fleeting image of it may not see (and I use that word intentionally) the depth and breadth of this. Anyone who has considered it, no matter how long ago, will most likely feel themselves to be in the room when reading this piece as opposed to being on the outside looking in. It is your vision and your ability to communicate it that makes me think so. You truly didn't need to say any of the subject's emotions or to go on at length - what you put on the page here speaks volumes because of the clarity and preciseness.
I've always thought that having remarkable vision must be both a blessing and a curse. I do not know you, your age, your circumstances or anything... but I know this - you have remarkable vision and poetic talent. And, from this reader's perspective anyway, those are the makings of an extraordinary life, assuming of course that one allows themselves it.
Take Care -
~Snemmy
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Re: V3
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by Immortal-Dragon21 on
Saturday, 22nd July 2006 @ 01:12:03 PM AEST
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| Thank you to everyone for your kind words of praise. I am glad you were all moved by this piece, I never really thought of it as one of my best but alot of people can understand the pain and sadness behind this poem. Truth be told this is a true to life account i wont go into the details though, but i really believe that to write something of such feeling you have to have experienced it first hand. Because you can always tell, thanks again so much everyone |
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