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just a friend
Contributed by
bluewolf
on
Tuesday, 18th July 2006 @ 07:46:59 PM in AEST
Topic:
SecretLove
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When we first met
I had no clue,
That soon I'd be
in love with you.
At first you were
Just someone new.
Someone to talk to
when there was nothing else to do.
Now if more than a day goes by,
where I don't at least say hi,
my hearts torn out,
and I just want to cry.
But though I feel this way,
I can't bring myself to say,
what I really want to say.
Maybe someday the words'll get out.
But for now I guess
I'm just your friend.
Someone to talk to,
when you have nothing else to do.
Copyright ©
bluewolf
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2006-07-18 19:46:59]
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Re: just a friend
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by Kimmie_mac on
Tuesday, 18th July 2006 @ 09:58:00 PM AEST
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I hope you get the courage because you never know what you have until it is gone.
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Re: just a friend
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by freespirit on
Wednesday, 19th July 2006 @ 12:42:06 AM AEST
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HI Welcome to the world of poets
remember
Words never spoken can never be heard
write from your heart
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Re: just a friend
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by Spike on
Wednesday, 19th July 2006 @ 06:59:02 AM AEST
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Pretty good. Reads well except for some repetitiveness in the initial rhyming scheme (clue/you/new/to/do). Vary it a little and it will flow better. That aside, you hit on a very real sentiment and common enough experience here.
Not a bad second post.
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Re: just a friend
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 19th July 2006 @ 12:28:36 PM AEST
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| Wonderful read and I agree "words never spoke, are never heard".......Mike |
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Re: just a friend
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by luckycharm on
Wednesday, 19th July 2006 @ 12:46:40 PM AEST
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| I can really relate 2 this because its hard to like someone and u feel as though they don't want u around or they don't notice u when they do. Keep your head up and just don't give up because soon someone will come and pick up all the pieces of your broken heart. God bless!.-luckycharm |
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