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Affectively Morose
Contributed by
hauntedscorp
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Monday, 10th July 2006 @ 10:03:00 AM in AEST
Topic:
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A true revelation of what's in store
And here we find it --
deeply seated in regret
Your tongues passivity; our ultimate threat
Oppressive in its yearning,
burning to be heard
The scattered clippings of contempt
fall silent to the barren floor
Hushed remnants of contentment
lay abandoned by the wayside
Here I sit alone;
in the blackness of my thoughts...
The clincher is the reality of a
saturated dream
Freckled shades of ignorant tones
are beginning to leave their mark
Compelling is the persistence to do this
time, and again
We talk in ineffectual smudges--
neither here nor there
Gaily haunting in its quietude--
The empty embrace of solitude.
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hauntedscorp
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2006-07-10 10:03:00]
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Re: Affectively Morose
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by Ruby2sdy on
Monday, 10th July 2006 @ 10:48:22 AM AEST
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As you say, for the most part this poem is free verse, but I love the little touches of internal rhyme, and the occasional end rhyme!!! A lovely piece, thanks for sharing,
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Re: Affectively Morose
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by lillyjane on
Monday, 10th July 2006 @ 11:34:24 AM AEST
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| Really good write thank you I loved it. xxxx |
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Re: Affectively Morose
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by Keilantra on
Monday, 10th July 2006 @ 11:39:41 AM AEST
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We talk in ineffectual smudges--
neither here nor there
That was easily th best lin. Good work
xXx
~kei |
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Re: Affectively Morose
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by jerseysue on
Monday, 10th July 2006 @ 01:04:27 PM AEST
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| I wish I could write like this, Rhyming verse seems to come so easily to me, but any other kind has me bamboozled. I thoroughly enjoyed reading this poem. Thank you . Sue x |
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Re: Affectively Morose
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 10th July 2006 @ 04:26:42 PM AEST
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*applauds*
Awesome free verse scorperino!!!
That first stanza is emotionally explosive .. and I believe what
follows is just as powerful. It's almost desperate, in a way how
we [humans] keep plunging in time and time again .. hoping
the this time, we shall attain that which we seek to make
ourselves complete. And one day .. we will
Extraordinary hun. And very thought provoking..
~Breezy |
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Re: Affectively Morose
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by candysears on
Monday, 10th July 2006 @ 04:51:55 PM AEST
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Brilliant write...
God Bless! |
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Re: Affectively Morose
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 10th July 2006 @ 06:31:30 PM AEST
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(((((((((( Scorperiffic ))))))))))
Cool title.
This poem is very powerful with emotion!!! It made me feel regret, loneliness, and sadness. Quite a metaphorical masterpiece!
Gee, I may have said it already; but I am really really glad to see you back and writing again. No matter the topic, you are quite the poetess!
A most genuine and welcomed unexpected time even though it seems sad. Funny how inspiration does that, huh.
*real like TIMbo hug*
Tim
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Re: Affectively Morose
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by Former_Member on
Monday, 10th July 2006 @ 07:54:27 PM AEST
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u r a poet of distinction honesty and truly a
craftsmen.straight foward and with style. not to mention more than an abundance of passionate thruths. in short always fullfilling are your writes. nicely done scorp.
((((Scorp))))
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Re: Affectively Morose
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by pUnKa_RaCh on
Monday, 10th July 2006 @ 08:33:10 PM AEST
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brilliant.
such poised words.
always a pleaure
love love
xx |
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Re: Affectively Morose
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by Eternal_Dreamer on
Monday, 10th July 2006 @ 08:46:06 PM AEST
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Scorp~
My dear friend a thought provoking write you have penned and displayed before us. You have the natural ability to be able to express ur inner thoughts so well. Impressive as always. I hope that one day you will find what your heart desires my dear friend.
huge hugs for Scorpie~
sue m |
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Re: Affectively Morose
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by secretwind on
Tuesday, 11th July 2006 @ 02:45:13 AM AEST
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I stand and applaud
loud and long
well done |
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Re: Affectively Morose
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by Davinah on
Tuesday, 11th July 2006 @ 05:04:54 AM AEST
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A brilliant piece of work!
~D~ |
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Re: Affectively Morose
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by poet_in_waiting on
Tuesday, 11th July 2006 @ 10:05:33 AM AEST
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wow ... so much has already been said, and someone already pointed out my favorite line
'We talk in ineffectual smudges--
neither here nor there'
so i will simply reiterate .. great free flowing write
cheers
sean
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Re: Affectively Morose
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 11th July 2006 @ 01:56:42 PM AEST
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Free verse?I'm not so sure.Your uncontrollable ability to deliver,beautifully,in rhyme, is straining at the leash.
'Your tongues passivity,our ultimate threat
Oppressive in its yearning,
burning to be heard'
Now,that just sings to me but then again,the whole poem does,
Den |
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Re: Affectively Morose
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by Man_On_High on
Wednesday, 12th July 2006 @ 09:06:25 PM AEST
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great impromptu verse scorp.. Paulie and I go back 'n forth.. 4 words given to each other, where each must begin it's relative line..ending up with a 4 line line stanza.. (impromptu as well..)
you can learn a lot about a person this way~
..and I feel the last line as sure as I do, my own heartbeat-
good stuff-
Billy |
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Re: Affectively Morose
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by Former_Member on
Tuesday, 18th July 2006 @ 02:07:24 PM AEST
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A very natural flow. You do free verse quite well!
Not the best kind od lonely, is it? |
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Re: Affectively Morose
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by darkangeleyes57 on
Wednesday, 15th November 2006 @ 10:19:05 AM AEST
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Amazing yet again.. I love reading your work because you have so much talent and your poems are very good..
Take care
Christina |
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Re: Affectively Morose
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by ladyfawn on
Friday, 23rd May 2014 @ 05:16:06 PM AEST
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yea, have to get my daily fix
lovely as garden's windchimes,
see what scorpy has betwix
her beautiful melodious rhymes,
i love your line,'we talk in ineffectual smudges'
very creative and clever,
hugs n' love nessa
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