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Baby you know I love
Contributed by
Devilish_Baby_Girl
on
Thursday, 6th July 2006 @ 02:22:22 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Baby its been months now,
I'm so in love with you
Your my biggest clown,
And I only laugh for you.
You brighten my morning,
Saying *Good morning sweetie*
You say it so sweetly
I love you Baby
Your my star at night,
Your smile shines so bright,
Without your love,
I would lose the light.
I never knew how I was so beautiful,
Till the day you yelled at me for saying Im fat,
And the day you made me fall in love,
Without you my heart wouldnt be this full.
I love you more than anything,
You are my everything,
Your the only one I want to be seeing,
Your the reason why I'm always dancing and singing.
BABY I LOVE YOU SO MUCH!!
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2006-07-06 14:22:22]
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Re: Baby you know I love
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by vixdave on
Thursday, 6th July 2006 @ 04:08:39 PM AEST
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ok it is good I just think that you forced it too much. I mean poetry is suppost to come naturally. The last paragraph "I love you more than anything,
You are my everything,"
Everything and anything sound kinda similar, so it's like you are saying the same word twice. I think you need to work on it a little bit...But it is very sweet! Dont give up darling!! Keep writing more, you will improve tremendously!
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Re: Baby you know I love
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by Former_Member on
Wednesday, 13th December 2006 @ 09:56:14 PM AEST
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| awww..love ya sis |
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