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~*Fair Stars All In White*~...Sue & Billy
Contributed by
eternal_dreamer
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Monday, 3rd July 2006 @ 01:03:15 AM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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"Oh you!" ..the moon that caresses the evening sky
With it's soft and luminous paradise,
How may the wind drive
One pain away:
"By patience or sacrifice
In the midst of this starlit night "
From deep below
I lay my head against my pillow
To hear a lost soul's bitter cry,
My eyes so heavy they fall to rest.
Silent moments slowly creep up,
Evoking the burdens in my chest
And still I find nothingness.
Alas! It was through me, she fell..
What's the price bitterness may buy;
Some passing dreams paused in flight,
Poised like fair stars all in white
With piercing pity in thine eyes?
"Ah woe!" he said.. that joy and peace
Comes, but at a price!
For thoughts that wail will never cease-
Though thou hast gone to paradise!
Eternal Dreamer .. Man On High 2006
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Re: ~*Fair Stars All In White*~...Sue & Billy
(User Rating: 1 ) by godsangel2006 on
Monday, 3rd July 2006 @ 01:20:30 AM AEST (User
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ohh that is so beautiful
i am impress. :)
You two make a great team.
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Re: ~*Fair Stars All In White*~...Sue & Billy
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Monday, 3rd July 2006 @ 02:08:46 AM AEST (User
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Oh, wow, it's kinda of a sad poem yet happy too. Very beautifully written, you two.
Thank you for sharing.
Tim
:-)
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Re: ~*Fair Stars All In White*~...Sue & Billy
(User Rating: 1 ) by lillyjane on
Monday, 3rd July 2006 @ 03:17:47 AM AEST (User
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Really good you do make a great team, you should more together xxx |
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Re: ~*Fair Stars All In White*~...Sue & Billy
(User Rating: 1 ) by NoSaint on
Monday, 3rd July 2006 @ 09:14:03 AM AEST (User
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beautifully written flowed well a shining write
Shari |
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Re: ~*Fair Stars All In White*~...Sue & Billy
(User Rating: 1 ) by wizard on
Monday, 3rd July 2006 @ 10:20:01 AM AEST (User
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awesome write guys...i loved it completely!!!
wiz |
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Re: ~*Fair Stars All In White*~...Sue & Billy
(User Rating: 1 ) by hauntedscorp on
Monday, 3rd July 2006 @ 11:53:08 AM AEST (User
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Great stuff you two!! Wonderful flow and expression. Keep it up!
Scorp. |
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Re: ~*Fair Stars All In White*~...Sue & Billy
(User Rating: 1 ) by Rakerman1999 on
Monday, 3rd July 2006 @ 03:40:38 PM AEST (User
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It is impossible for the two of you talented writers to pen anything that isnt spectacular.
A combination would have to produce a write that falls under the catagory of " ageless and beautiful".
This is just breathtaking my friends
Very well done
Roses and drinks
Larry |
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Re: ~*Fair Stars All In White*~...Sue & Billy
(User Rating: 1 ) by emystar on
Wednesday, 5th July 2006 @ 03:30:15 AM AEST (User
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Wow u 2 should continue.
Great work.
huggs, smiles,
emy |
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Re: ~*Fair Stars All In White*~...Sue & Billy
(User Rating: 1 ) by In_a_while on
Thursday, 6th July 2006 @ 02:39:41 PM AEST (User
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striking, eternal and echoing forever in the mind!!
i love it, it's brilliant with it's dazzlling visuals and
at times, mournful tone.
Alas! It was through me, she fell..
What's the price bitterness may buy;
Some passing dreams paused in flight,
Poised like fair stars all in white
With piercing pity in thine eyes?
amazing, i'm at awe with the splendour of both
teamwork and individual effort... but i don't think
the seams could be seen. Great work you two!!
dw |
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Re: ~*Fair Stars All In White*~...Sue & Billy
(User Rating: 1 ) by Saloni on
Tuesday, 5th December 2006 @ 04:40:08 AM AEST (User
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beautiful poem!!
lots of huggs n kisses for u sue! ur an angel!
Saloni |
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Re: ~*Fair Stars All In White*~...Sue & Billy
(User Rating: 1 ) by MisfitMe on
Tuesday, 23rd January 2007 @ 05:02:09 PM AEST (User
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This is beautiful. Great joint effort...I've tried this myself w/ another, but w/ no where near the success of this...Excellent job, you two!!!
BigLove~Me |
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