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Divinity In Abstract
Contributed by
Sasha
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Sunday, 25th June 2006 @ 11:13:12 PM in AEST
Topic:
abstract
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White notes work their subconscious grafts
Plunging her nights into the collective
Walking her to destiny’s fifth carpet
Leading her on in light’s sentient pace
Midnight voices speak from distant hollows
Sounds that beat music’s primal call
New roads step her life’s fragile length
Winding roads to claim her at the 12th curve
Languages roll empty, ignorant and shy
Thoughts rush lucid winking their intelligence
Cognition dances its smoky ritual
Simmering unknown its diurnal ways
Molding her fast from his secret strength
Giving her form for her final return…
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Sasha
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2006-06-25 23:13:12]
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Re: Divinity In Abstract
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by Spike on
Friday, 1st September 2006 @ 03:48:09 AM AEST
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Hmmm, I think its an observation of transmigration and rebirth along the karmic path, but may be way off. Nice poem, but I'm not a big fan of interpretative poetry - the mystery and all that. I like to know what the author is talking about in the allusions and references from their persective. I can always make other interpretations of my own.
My sense of it is that, the more obtuse or enigmatic a poem becomes, the less accessible it is. The best way to remedy this is write the poem firstly for yourself, then put yourself into the shoes of the average reader and re-write. You may want to log an afterword to assist the reader on particular wording and references.
Still, obtuse drivel worked for Bob Dylan and David Bowie, and William Burroughs, etc
Anyway, another '0' bites the dust!
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Re: Divinity In Abstract
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by Spike on
Friday, 1st September 2006 @ 07:01:48 AM AEST
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Sasha, I just realised what I said about some others artists spouting obtuse 'drivel' - in no way is your poetry drivel. Sorry for the poor referencing on my part. What poetry of yours that I've read is quiet beautiful, and clearly steeped in meaning.
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