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Stolen
Contributed by
lostinmyself
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Thursday, 22nd June 2006 @ 07:10:00 PM in AEST
Topic:
SadPoetry
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You stole the memories that we made,
Tucked them into your own small place,
Took them away so no one could see,
But the worse thing you did, was never tell me.
You stole all the words that I wanted to say,
You did it so fast, in the most harmful way,
Not caring or noting, I couldn't be strong,
You've left and I know that I loved you too long.
And precious emotions will soon disappear,
There's another one lost, with every new tear,
I wish I had time, but I now have no choice,
You've left me alone, I'm forgetting your voice.
Two years of memories were stolen today,
Without hesitation, you took them away,
And trying to remember, just brings the tears,
I know now they're gone, you'll no longer be here.
Copyright ©
lostinmyself
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2006-06-22 19:10:00] (Date/Time posted on
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Re: Stolen
(User Rating: 1 ) by ever1der on
Thursday, 22nd June 2006 @ 07:17:48 PM AEST (User
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This really has good flow and rhyme..I like it a lot. |
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Re: Stolen
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 22nd June 2006 @ 07:20:17 PM AEST (User
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Powerfully coherent eventhough fraught with emotional frustration. That underlying strength of self determination shines through more clearly with each tear shed. Don't have t' cry o'er stolen moments no more; by golly, you're makin'new ones and I, fer one YPDCer, thank you for includin' us with your words in that memorymakin'. Outstanding and enjoyable write 'n' read.
wabl
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Re: Stolen
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 22nd June 2006 @ 08:37:28 PM AEST (User
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very sad write, most enjoyable though.. yes beautifully sad write.. nice to be reading your poetry again phil.
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Re: Stolen
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 22nd June 2006 @ 09:06:23 PM AEST (User
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OMG! Phyllis, this is sooooo sad. :-( I'm sorry to hear about your pain.
*huge hug*
You have certainly written a great poem though out of that pain. It's kinda great and kinda strange how we poets & poetesses can write some awesome poems from our pain. This one tugs at the ol' heart strings and is truly a tear jerker.
These lines are awesome:
"And precious emotions will soon disappear,
There's another one lost, with every new tear,"
You certainly are a brilliant poetess and as this poem suggests, I hope things get better for you soon.
Sincerely,
Tim
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Re: Stolen
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 22nd June 2006 @ 09:19:20 PM AEST (User
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Of course the rythmn and the rhyme are soooo good!! but the sad feeling just feel soooo deep!
Hugs lil sis......... |
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Re: Stolen
(User Rating: 1 ) by Former_Member on
Thursday, 22nd June 2006 @ 09:30:37 PM AEST (User
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Beautiful write that expresses what is necessary in order that the heart may heal and in time love again. I never heard you use the word love before, it sounded beautiful. lovely penning phill and wishing you a most
gentle recovery from you loss.
((((Phill))))
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Re: Stolen
(User Rating: 1 ) by Vampirequeen on
Thursday, 22nd June 2006 @ 10:42:18 PM AEST (User
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wow philly girl its so sad and deep
you did an awsome job on this. |
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Re: Stolen
(User Rating: 1 ) by shelby on
Thursday, 22nd June 2006 @ 11:56:00 PM AEST (User
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perfectly written poem deat Phiill. Im so sorry for this pain though. I feel your heart upon the words of this write. Im always a pm away!
hugeeeeeeeee huggers
Michelle |
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Re: Stolen
(User Rating: 1 ) by liquidsunshine on
Sunday, 25th June 2006 @ 12:38:09 AM AEST (User
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I know you're hurting, but if it's any consolation, this is a wonderful poem. : )
***HUGS***
Love you!
Chels |
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Re: Stolen
(User Rating: 1 ) by Eternal_Dreamer on
Tuesday, 27th June 2006 @ 05:05:30 PM AEST (User
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Phil~
sweet girl such sadness and pain flow from ur write. You have poured out what pains ur wounded heart my dear friend. Sadly some of the best writes have came when one writes from a pained and wounded heart. May u find a loving person who shall love ur beautiful heart and make precious moments with u to last a lifetime. I'm so sorry for the hurt u feel right now Phil~ Wishing u much brighter days ahead my dear friend.
love n hugs,
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Re: Stolen
(User Rating: 1 ) by Spike on
Friday, 30th June 2006 @ 05:48:14 AM AEST (User
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A real heart-tugger all right. Beautifully written - I wonder what the mystery behind it is, hmm?
Spike |
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Re: Stolen
(User Rating: 1 ) by wizard on
Sunday, 2nd July 2006 @ 06:01:29 PM AEST (User
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very nicely done!
wiz |
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Re: Stolen
(User Rating: 1 ) by Rhei76 on
Tuesday, 5th September 2006 @ 06:37:00 PM AEST (User
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I like it.
but of coarse I'ld be the theif.
I love your expression |
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Re: Stolen
(User Rating: 1 ) by Chloe-Sama on
Sunday, 30th March 2008 @ 09:14:04 PM AEST (User
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I Really Like Your Poem
Its so sad... And it has a lot of meaning.
Its a beautiful write.
Well done =] |
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