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My Drum
Contributed by
GurlyTye
on
Tuesday, 20th June 2006 @ 03:06:32 PM in AEST
Topic:
EmotionalPoetry
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Blue skies
A light breeze
I look out
Across the open seas
I breathe deep
And release slow
My life
Is finally on the go
My destination
Is quite unclear
But in my heart
I hold no fear
My aspiration
For a new life
Endless possibilities
On a road without strife
My vision of
A new start
With no dramatic conflict
And a freshly healed heart
Today is the day
I get a second chance
To learn
This beautiful dance
The beating of my heart
Is the rhythm of my drum
To lose myself
Is a moment yet to come.
Copyright ©
GurlyTye
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2006-06-20 15:06:32]
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Re: My Drum
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by Lucid_Tides on
Tuesday, 20th June 2006 @ 03:24:20 PM AEST
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| It's a definate fact that one can write something out of nothing and make so much sense out of it. It seems as though our minds hold the power and thoughts that our subconcious mind hides from the world and ourselves. Sometimes it will come in dreams and these words are a helpful hint in life that something may occur in the future in which this poem may explain precisely. Keep this in thought. Great Poem. |
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Re: My Drum
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by Essentially9 on
Tuesday, 20th June 2006 @ 04:39:19 PM AEST
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you had good rhythm and rhyme in this. i liked the ending. i dont really care for the concept, but you at least wrote it well. as for these lines, "A new start
With no dramatic conflict"....my new starts dont last more than a few days ::sighs:: |
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Re: My Drum
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by Nazmythian on
Tuesday, 20th June 2006 @ 09:02:11 PM AEST
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You are right, of course ... the last line would work either way ... as IS ... or IN. Imagine ... me not seeing that till I read it a third time.
( just kidding )
Nice post T.
Nazzy ~
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