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Need you
Contributed by
I_like_cheese
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Saturday, 17th June 2006 @ 12:14:07 AM in AEST
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I remember that day,
It was the 4th of July.
I was a young girl,
Looking into a young man's eyes.
I didn't know what time would bring,
But all my dreams came true.
Most people want life's luxuries,
But all I want is you.
Because I need you so badly,
I can't explain it in words.
I remember all the good times,
And baby it hurts.
We couldn't be together,
No matter how hard we tried.
Now all I want is to,
Look into your eyes.
Baby I love you,
At least that much is true.
My life was so much better,
When I had someone to reach out to.
I think about you all the time,
Day or night.
Now all I want is to,
Be back in your life.
Because I need you so badly,
I can't explain it in words.
I remember all the good times,
And baby it hurts.
We couldn't be together,
No matter how hard we tried.
Now all I want is to,
Look into your eyes.
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Re: Need you
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by twick on
Saturday, 17th June 2006 @ 12:19:44 AM AEST
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I was your first!
I really liked this one. I think it could be an actual song.
Welcome, welcome,
don't be a stanger pardner! |
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Re: Need you
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by emystar on
Saturday, 17th June 2006 @ 01:14:41 AM AEST
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sad but this is really good writing.
huggs,
emy |
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Re: Need you
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by cheetham on
Saturday, 17th June 2006 @ 01:37:38 AM AEST
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| I like this, its a topic many can relate to, and it's written in a way that avoids the familiar feeling of being smacked about the face with 'the book of cliches'. Aside from that, it's well written and I agree with ^, definate potential for musical accompaniment |
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Re: Need you
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by bluestars on
Saturday, 17th June 2006 @ 01:39:14 AM AEST
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Wow, what an amazing song.
Its really great maybe someday we'll hear it on the radio huh?
Best wishes,
~*Eve*~ |
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Re: Need you
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by lostinmyself on
Saturday, 17th June 2006 @ 09:51:41 AM AEST
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Welcome to YPDC :)
This is a good first submission. It flows well, it is easy to understand and it makes the reader want to read more. The simplicity here is welcome. It says everything that is needed to be said, but doesn't embalish too much. It's simple, it's gorgeous.
And it's very easy to feel.
Good write, and once again, welcome.
Phyllis xxx |
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Re: Need you
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by bronzen on
Saturday, 17th June 2006 @ 10:45:57 AM AEST
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| very good seems like lyrics to me keep penning thanks for sharing |
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Re: Need you
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by I_like_cheese on
Tuesday, 20th June 2006 @ 01:00:47 AM AEST
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hey yall, please voice your opinions and let me know what you think about these lyrics. i wrote this song for my ex. so please comment freely. it will be appreciated.
thanks erin
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