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Sapphire Tears
Contributed by
Ruby2sdy
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Thursday, 15th June 2006 @ 06:09:36 AM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Tears, like sapphires, fell from my eyes,
The glass on the pavement shattered like lies,
The world caved in; the sleeping awoke,
All in the moment that my heart broke.
The rain poured, cooled my burning skin,
The moment life ended, yours seemed to begin,
A decade of promises, steeped within sin,
You locked your heart’s doors; let no one in.
Forgive me for crying, for letting things show,
For telling you things that no one should know,
For loving you still; despite all you did,
Too young to forget; too old to forgive,
So my friend, walk away, ignore these tears of mine,
And these words, with my heart, wrapped up in each line,
Nothing can heal, except the passage of time,
The price that we pay, for a taste of the divine.
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Ruby2sdy
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2006-06-15 06:09:36]
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Re: Sapphire Tears
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by wizard on
Thursday, 15th June 2006 @ 06:16:58 AM AEST
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nice write...i enjoyed it!
wiz |
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Re: Sapphire Tears
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by Former_Member on
Thursday, 15th June 2006 @ 01:14:12 PM AEST
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| i know that feeling. i recently went through a situation exactly like that. great write loved the emotion in it. i look forward to reading more of your work! keep it up! |
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Re: Sapphire Tears
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by jerseysue on
Friday, 16th June 2006 @ 02:03:35 AM AEST
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| Beautiful words, and very sad story. Absolutely loved it. Sue x |
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Re: Sapphire Tears
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by Sasha on
Friday, 16th June 2006 @ 04:53:13 AM AEST
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| Good write, I loved every single line, especially the last one... |
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Re: Sapphire Tears
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by lostinmyself on
Saturday, 17th June 2006 @ 11:55:15 AM AEST
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Aww...This is just too sad...
This poem is well written, but it's hard to enjoy it, because it's very heartbreaking, and very relatable.
I think it's good. the flow works well, and the rhyme doesn't sound fake, which many poems do, these days.
Fantastic descriptions in the first 4-5 lines.
Good write,
Phil xxx |
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