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Lost. Alone and Scared
Contributed by
shortie_emmy
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Tuesday, 6th June 2006 @ 04:22:49 PM in AEST
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Scared out of her mind. Knows No one. Can't find a way out. Pretends to act strong. She see's a shadow in the distance. Realizes she must not be alone. She screams for help. The shadow gets farther and farther away. She tries and tries to chase down the shadow. Shadows don't listen. She screams again but this time she screams HELP!. 2 days an hour later she lays on cold cement dying out of her misery.
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Re: Lost. Alone and Scared
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by shortie_emmy on
Tuesday, 17th October 2006 @ 08:13:26 PM AEST
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no one left me a comment so ill comment to my self.lol hehe im on crack. lol im not.
well that i think lol. heheh .~my self~ |
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Re: Lost. Alone and Scared
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by Strawberry on
Wednesday, 21st May 2008 @ 10:42:05 PM AEST
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heyy
its a good write
but u might want to try verse
but its a really good write
keep up the great work =]
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Re: Lost. Alone and Scared
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by cardisje3 on
Sunday, 25th May 2008 @ 05:19:35 AM AEST
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| there is only one part that did not make too much sence to me, ("2 days an hour later she ") maybe its just me but the it looks like somethinging is missing right there. |
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Re: Lost. Alone and Scared
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by cardisje3 on
Sunday, 25th May 2008 @ 05:20:49 AM AEST
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| forgot to add a comment ... other than prievous statment, i thought the poem was great. |
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Re: Lost. Alone and Scared
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 8th June 2008 @ 04:03:08 AM AEST
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| well wrote i like it but you may wanna try seperating it into lines and stanzas |
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