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Title? how about ''to hell with all this crap''
Contributed by
drtylilsecret
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Saturday, 3rd June 2006 @ 12:53:29 PM in AEST
Topic:
anguished
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Damn this place, I say to all
Feel free to watch me as I fall
Go off to play your naive game,
Every day it's all the same
I'm an ocean and a sea or three,
From anyone who could save me
Spin my head round, as i'm driven insane,
I reached to you but all in vain
You've got front row seats, so please, be seated,
Watch as I get shamelessly defeated
Life's pawn at play, i'm standing on the chopping block,
"your time's up", chimes the devil's clock
Nobody's to blame, i tried
But with hell now i collide
Copyright ©
drtylilsecret
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2006-06-03 12:53:29]
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Re: Title? how about ''to hell with all this crap''
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by Former_Member on
Saturday, 3rd June 2006 @ 02:23:44 PM AEST
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This sounds like me when I lived in metropolitan Phoenix, Arizona (fast 'n' faster lanes o' livin' in the USA). I wrote what I can only call an answer from m' Maker to a "way out" of what this world's becoming! Ask ya read my post, Understanding.
Your poem, first off is excellent, captures considerable emotive confusion, annoyance, lonliness and impatience. Sounds like step 1, 2 or 3 of therapy poetry. Hang in there! |
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Re: Title? how about ''to hell with all this crap''
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by Man_On_High on
Saturday, 17th June 2006 @ 08:42:24 PM AEST
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fantastic impromptu work..
and a fine title indeed!
I've often felt the very same way-
B |
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Re: Title? how about ''to hell with all this crap''
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by Former_Member on
Sunday, 18th June 2006 @ 03:26:17 PM AEST
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wow. this poem is...amazing. i absolutely love it...some poems are the best when written just kind of randomly. you don't have enough time to criticise yourself and change all the good parts.
beautiful
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