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Last Chance
Contributed by
GurlyTye
on
Tuesday, 30th May 2006 @ 07:18:52 PM in AEST
Topic:
LovePoetry
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Not to long ago
I met this extraordinary boy
Amazingly loving
But always a little coy
Expeditious was the pace
My heart fell into his trap
Deeper I plummet into this
Blissful abyss
I gave to him my heart
For just one more kiss
Now I am stuck
In an endless merry-go-round
Only for him
Does my heart bleed
My stupidity doesn’t
Extinguish this need
He asks for yet another chance
Does he have something to prove?
My mangled soul
Screams in terror
Will this risk
Be another judgment in error
Every new breath
Becomes more difficult then the last
My affections are endless
My love unbound
My breath whispers his name
As my heart slips to the ground.
To him
I give these words
Last chance
One more try
For you
I will no longer cry
If your intentions are true
Then show me what you have to prove
My love extends
Until the end of time
To not be yours
Is truly a crime
You asked for one more shot
Then give it all you got.
Copyright ©
GurlyTye
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2006-05-30 19:18:52]
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Re: Last Chance
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by ever1der on
Tuesday, 30th May 2006 @ 08:43:13 PM AEST
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| good subject matter and nice rhyme |
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Re: Last Chance
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by emystar on
Tuesday, 30th May 2006 @ 09:26:40 PM AEST
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A bit sad but awesomely written.
I can certainly relate to this one.
Hope he realizes what he has and does u right. Course I know from experience it don't take um long to back to their old ways. Still u might be one of the lucky ones that actually gets heart-n-soul change..
Keep writing.
huggs, prayer,
emy |
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Re: Last Chance
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by ButchCorpuz on
Wednesday, 31st May 2006 @ 03:40:29 PM AEST
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Great poem. Very creative and vivid.
Keep writing.
-Butch
-Betrayer of Hope |
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Re: Last Chance
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by Nazmythian on
Thursday, 1st June 2006 @ 01:16:43 AM AEST
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I think you done good here dear. Your thoughts are concise and clear. and you play with rhyme. Not to mention that you use what I beleive to be a new format to what you have used in the past. It shows growth and maturity. It also makes me proud ... to be who I am.
Well done T ... I liked this one aot.
Nazzy ~ |
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