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My Guilty Conscience
Contributed by
mali
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Sunday, 28th May 2006 @ 02:19:43 AM in AEST
Topic:
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In my life, Ive done so many things
that are wrong, and against what I believe
which I cant change, or replace,
but I must start to learn from these mistakes.
The secrets I keep, and the choices I make
Inside me they will forever stay,
Because the are mistakes and now I plea
That I find, my conscience guilty.
Im sorry for those people, I never gave a chance
And sorry for lying, under any circumstance,
Im sorry to all those people, I have hurt
Sorry for not telling him sooner, I treated him like dirt.
Im guilty of fibbing to the people I love
Im guilty for portraying the people above,
Im guilty for stealing and I admit it was wrong
and the secrets I kept for far too long.
These are just some of the confessions I keep inside
Which I have to leave them hide,
I wish I could change the choices I make
But that's why they're called mistakes.
Copyright ©
mali
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2006-05-28 02:19:43]
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Re: My Guilty Conscience
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by emystar on
Sunday, 28th May 2006 @ 02:36:06 AM AEST
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Great writing.
We all have regrets.
God forgave us at the cross so we all must learn to forgive our selves.
huggs,
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Re: My Guilty Conscience
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by EddieDean on
Sunday, 28th May 2006 @ 05:57:47 AM AEST
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I used to live by the motto of "No Regrets", but now I realize that if I don't regret my mistakes then I am doomed to repeat them. Granted, if given the chance, I'd go back and change some of the choices I've made. Just like many of us.
Good work, very emotional.
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Re: My Guilty Conscience
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by ever1der on
Sunday, 28th May 2006 @ 03:20:35 PM AEST
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| nice write..it flows well... |
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Re: My Guilty Conscience
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by 3x5 on
Thursday, 1st June 2006 @ 10:12:50 PM AEST
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I commend you for writing an apology poem, but there are a few thigns I'd like to mention. I'm new myself so I'm not sure if all if this is true, but I think you're using way too many cliches and forced rhyming.
"I'm guilty for portraying the people above"
In that sentence you aren't really clear..I had to re-read it again to understand what you meant.
"I'm sorry for those people, I never gave a chance..and sorry for lying, under any circumstance"
There is an example of forced rhyming. You're using an AABB format in this poem, which isn't bad..but you get that..rhyming that makes the poem so much simpler. |
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Re: My Guilty Conscience
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by lovespoetic0518 on
Monday, 10th July 2006 @ 04:40:19 AM AEST
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| Very well written poem, We all do make mistakes, I for one am not perfect, so it was nice to read this and be reminded that we can learn from them. Take care! |
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Re: My Guilty Conscience
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by midian on
Thursday, 10th August 2006 @ 07:59:25 AM AEST
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i'm going through something at the moment.. and this really put it into perspective for me thankyou so much xx
"Im sorry for those people, I never gave a chance
And sorry for lying, under any circumstance,
Im sorry to all those people, I have hurt
Sorry for not telling him sooner, I treated him like dirt"
really touching!
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